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    dots Submission Name: Holy Experimentdots
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    Author: Paradox
    ASL Info:    25/m/Earthbound
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 520/314/58
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I don't know where this poem came from. After a sleepless night of frustration because I was unable to write,at about 9 am, all of a sudden I started writing this. It only took me about a minute to write it and I haven't changed anything since then, except a couple of spelling errors.



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    dotsHoly Experimentdots
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    Let's take the Sainted Trinity
    Break it down
    And form a triangle
    Now
    Let's take this divine triangle
    Place it in the current set of physical laws
    (It supposedly created)
    And spin it
    With the fastest possible speed
    Let's see what corner will break off first
    (Compelled by centrifugal force)
    Will Jesus break into pieces?
    Will The Holy Ghost lose its ethereal substance?
    Or will God be so mad as to make us revolve around it again?





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      Fucc yea Storm of Bliss was right I do dig this piece. We sound like kindred spirits and yes I have been forced to write from sleepless nights. To tell you the truth those are when the best one's tend to come out.

    Take care,
    Mike
    | Posted on 2006-11-07 00:00:00 | by fryte | [ Reply to This ]
      Christ, what an original idea! Wow.

    Okay, a few small spelling errors:

    “Will The Holly Ghost loose its ethereal substance?”

    It should be “Holy” and “lose.” That’s really all the nits I could find.

    But this has some sort of underlying power I can’t put my finger on. It can come off as offensive to some radical Christians, and yet, it doesn’t carry that controversial/accusing tone of voice at all, which was just great. Something about this speaks to me, whether it’s the amalgamation of science and truth and faith, or just the fact this poem in and of itself is an experiment or attempt to find the greater truth . . . [censored] . . . this is heavy stuff. Sorry to stroke your ego here, but I haven’t read anything like this, on this site or elsewhere. I’m getting kind of excited, hehe.

    It calls into question all that we were brainwashed or fed and is almost . . . revolutionary in what it’s saying. It makes people wonder what exactly is right, if any of us as humans are correct with our religions at all. Honestly, I don’t think so, I think whatever is out there is way too great for us to understand, and to bicker about the technicalities is just suicidal on a global level.

    [censored].

    I’m keeping this. I could talk about the subject forever. You’re a special one.

    Alia
    | Posted on 2006-11-05 00:00:00 | by Storm of Bliss | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this. It's amazing how some of the best things one writes come out so fast. It reminded me of a science teacher telling the class what to do. Very interesting, and probably unanswerable questions, and you've probably upset all the God-botherers, but I thought it was a unique little write. Five stars.
    | Posted on 2005-03-17 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      There's some really interesting ideas in there, like the opposition of religious and physical. I also like the non-poetic but scientific style you've worded this text in.
    | Posted on 2005-01-24 00:00:00 | by the apocrypha | [ Reply to This ]
      Ummmm...do you mean Holy? I'll jsut say you do and say that's an...ineresting piece. I think i like it...i mean it's weird, but though provoking.
    | Posted on 2005-01-23 00:00:00 | by Mercy December | [ Reply to This ]
      love the idea of trying to dictate to god through the physical theories that "he" is supposed to have created.it would be a helluva job to confine god in such a small space in order to carry out the experiment though. i liked this a lot as it makes me think and above all its humourous and entertaining in a slightly sarcastic way. thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2005-01-23 00:00:00 | by undecided | [ Reply to This ]


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