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    dots Submission Name: Holy Experimentdots
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    Author: Paradox
    ASL Info:    25/m/Earthbound
    Elite Ratio:    4.04 - 647/352/64
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 488
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 551



    Description:
       I don't know where this poem came from. After a sleepless night of frustration because I was unable to write,at about 9 am, all of a sudden I started writing this. It only took me about a minute to write it and I haven't changed anything since then, except a couple of spelling errors.



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    dotsHoly Experimentdots
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    Let's take the Sainted Trinity
    Break it down
    And form a triangle
    Now
    Let's take this divine triangle
    Place it in the current set of physical laws
    (It supposedly created)
    And spin it
    With the fastest possible speed
    Let's see what corner will break off first
    (Compelled by centrifugal force)
    Will Jesus break into pieces?
    Will The Holy Ghost lose its ethereal substance?
    Or will God be so mad as to make us revolve around it again?





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      Part of me dislikes this, ( the part that has respect for God in all it's forms.
    But the rebel in me likes it. It doesn't have the feel of traditional poetry but at the same time can any art really be completely defined. The limits to the arts are that of imagination. I liked the (-----) Thoughts within the thought it often doesn't work but i have to say it's exceptional here.
    | Posted on 2008-11-21 00:00:00 | by shaman | [ Reply to This ]
      Fucc yea Storm of Bliss was right I do dig this piece. We sound like kindred spirits and yes I have been forced to write from sleepless nights. To tell you the truth those are when the best one's tend to come out.

    Take care,
    Mike
    | Posted on 2006-11-07 00:00:00 | by fryte | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this. It's amazing how some of the best things one writes come out so fast. It reminded me of a science teacher telling the class what to do. Very interesting, and probably unanswerable questions, and you've probably upset all the God-botherers, but I thought it was a unique little write. Five stars.
    | Posted on 2005-03-17 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      There's some really interesting ideas in there, like the opposition of religious and physical. I also like the non-poetic but scientific style you've worded this text in.
    | Posted on 2005-01-24 00:00:00 | by the apocrypha | [ Reply to This ]
      Ummmm...do you mean Holy? I'll jsut say you do and say that's an...ineresting piece. I think i like it...i mean it's weird, but though provoking.
    | Posted on 2005-01-23 00:00:00 | by Mercy December | [ Reply to This ]
      love the idea of trying to dictate to god through the physical theories that "he" is supposed to have created.it would be a helluva job to confine god in such a small space in order to carry out the experiment though. i liked this a lot as it makes me think and above all its humourous and entertaining in a slightly sarcastic way. thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2005-01-23 00:00:00 | by undecided | [ Reply to This ]


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