Fuck::Me::Slutty by MerryDeath

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Author:	MerryDeath
ASL Info:	20/f/Ohio
Elite Ratio:	4.49 - 348/355/70
Words:	112

Class/Type:	Poetry/Happy
Total Views:	446
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	663

Description:
I stupidly posted this at like 4:30am today... a time when not a soul is online... so, this is my re-post at peak online time!!! *md*

{{feeling a little..... erm..... frisky.... *grins* i've already swallowed once tonight... i plan to make it a hat trick... *md*}}

Fuck::Me::Slutty dots

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beside me, entice me, invite me to stay
delight me, so tightly, this grrrl wants to play
caress me, undress me and turn up the heat
you gonna give a slut her favorite treat?

corrode me, corrupt me, defile my lips
love me and fuck me and shatter my hips
divide me, collide me, reinvent my tongue
if i breathe any faster i'll puncture a lung

grind me, inside me, i'll leave you with scars
bruise me and lose me and make me see starrs
come with me, cum with me, split me apart
one scream at a time and its back to the start

Submitted on 2005-01-23 18:01:58 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
5: Wow!

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  i like this. its open clear desire lust SEX DRIVEN CRAAAAAAAAZE. it flows so amazingly with a great rhythm, id love to hear it as a song, thatd be freaking awesome
| Posted on 2005-05-18 00:00:00 | by andnow | [ Reply to This ]
  WOW, this is so great on so many levels. The flow, the imagination, the use of words, the whole damn thing. I love it... straight to my fav's. Great write.
| Posted on 2005-05-12 00:00:00 | by ashlee_jane2003 | [ Reply to This ]
  The flow and the rhythm of this was very good. I appreciate a write which flows easily. I'm sure the content would shock many. But I'm sure the contents of most peoples' thoughts would do the same. Good write.
| Posted on 2005-05-10 00:00:00 | by Malcolm Bishop | [ Reply to This ]
  This is such a great write.. I mean you have some talent. I mean on this topic, anyways.. I like your choice of words, cause it made this smooth, flowed like a river.
Ok I really liked
if i breathe any faster i'll puncture a lung

I like that metaphor, sounds completely believable...

Good Write
stephanie
| Posted on 2005-05-04 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
  hello everyone. nice to meet you and your sex drive. lol. tee hee.

this is a great piece in which you shead all the moern boundaries of what may or may not be acceptable. you push it and make it worth it. you dont waste your time on the pleasantries of this that or the other, you get down to the nitty gritty.

i like the over-ish use of the letter are. i always purr when i am in a mood and you seem to capture that feelings. i can relate and this is great, and that shouldnt have rhymed even if this IS apoetry site. tee hee.

nice.
K
| Posted on 2005-04-11 00:00:00 | by Printer Shock | [ Reply to This ]
  hmmmm well I've just read all your comments and actually had to refer a friend over here to read them...lmfao! what the hell are people thinking...*shakes head* well I for one loved this poem. why are all the men shocked that a female wrote this...NOTE TO MEN: women like to f*uck too. sure the hugging and kissing and loving is nice but every now and then some women...(some more often than others) just need a good old fashion pull my hair spank my ass call me slut make it hurt so good fu*ck...there I said it. with out anything else more to say...*stands and applaudes* BRAVO MD BRAVO!
| Posted on 2005-02-17 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
  Well- it tickled my fancy- and you tickled something else entirely. I need to hydrate some now... People- let me tell you- lyke a fu<king Hoover, thys one! I mean- for serious. ~sigh~ I love my grrrl... The Number Six
| Posted on 2005-01-26 00:00:00 | by Six_Grey | [ Reply to This ]
  the swallowing part in your description actually makes me want to gag...

your poem certainly is out there and states the obvious! some people like it rough, i guess. i don't suppose you are the shy, retiring type, are ya?! good for you for going for what you want, that's all i gotta say!
| Posted on 2005-01-23 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
  wow, well, yes, this is definitely one way to look at sex. This was really good in a wow, I can't believe what this says kind of way. Congratulations to you for doing something that pushes a lot of boundaries. Anyway, there are several things interesting and worth mentioning here. One thing is that it doesn't focus on the emotional aspect of sex so much as it does on the mechanics and lust of it all. That's especially interesting from a female perspective. The thing is, the general stereotype is that women tend to think of sex in a more emotional way, while men just think of well, the sex part. often in a so called "dirty" way. But often times, especially when you're with a steady partner, sex is something that is done for fun when you are feeling, well, sort of frisky, like your description and the tone of your poem. But thanks for speaking up for the female in this and breaking the stereotype a little. Sort of reminds me of Sharon Olds. I love her stuff and she's definitely not afraid to push boundaries, which she's often gotten critisized for unfairly. Her pieces have even been called pornographic. But she is a truly gifted writer, and I would recommend her stuff to you.

Anyway, another thing I liked here was your use of rhyme and rhythm. It also fit extremely well with this poem, because sex itself is rhythmic. I also liked how certain lines sounded. Especially the second stanza and the last two lines.

Um, since you specified that you didn't want a critique and instead wanted to hear someone relate, I won't get myself in trouble again and will refrain from making any suggestions or mentioning what I didn't like. I can tell you that I did like a lot of this because even though I'm sort of new to having a sexual relationship (I only lost my virginity a month ago officially to my boyfriend), this is how I feel in my boyfriend's bedroom at, well, actually anytime. Anyway, this created some interesting deja vu for me, thanks.
| Posted on 2005-01-23 00:00:00 | by srcastic1 | [ Reply to This ]
  hahaha. this is [censored] great. It's so...raw. And kind of sarcastic as well. i mean...it could be so depressing, but it's not. It's tricky how you can just read it and miss what's actually being said in the smooth rythym, miss the fact that it does have actual meaning.. i think it does...does it? what is it? is it just an erotic poem or is it commentary? I'm not sure. Whatever it is, in a weird way, i like it.
| Posted on 2005-01-23 00:00:00 | by lukewarm | [ Reply to This ]
  woah...i don't think this poem could be anymore skeezy, but at the same time i liked it. i think it speaks for that deep desire in every person to be slutty, and seductive, and playful. haha...even though half of us will never be that in our lives. at least not me...lol. ok bye!

-christina.
| Posted on 2005-02-21 00:00:00 | by cre_dia | [ Reply to This ]
  Will you be in Florida anytime soon? I'd love to meet you and give you love for "Just One Night". Check out the piece if you haven't...I know you'll like it. I love the graphic nature, the unillusive imagery, the hard nose romance and the piece overall. Keep doing what ya doing baby and maybe one day we'll be doing each other.
| Posted on 2005-02-21 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]
  Hi *md* I have to say that this doesn't tickle my senses a bit. I suppose that's just me, I mean really, not even a ripple and yes, I love women and making love to women. And I think that's it, that it's so graphic that it's overpowering. Now, please don't stop writing what you want but it's like going straight for the bang without any foreplay. Does that say it right?
You're a deal, *md*

Nan
| Posted on 2005-01-25 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]

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