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    dots Submission Name: left behinddots
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    Author: fallenelf
    ASL Info:    19/f/pa
    Elite Ratio:    2.6 - 43/56/23
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Gothic
    Total Views: 232
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 969



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       uh, i submitted it to the newpaper, heh.


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    there’s that slip of time in your life
    when you believe
    but nothing occurs
    spontaneously you seek a treasure to hoard
    but it’s too deep to uncover
    the dust clogs your lungs
    and you can’t breathe
    suffocating on your vile self-revulsion
    the crimson streams cloud your vision
    the loathing may only last a second
    but the throbbing still remains
    from a decision you knew
    could change your life forever
    and it passed you by
    you’re a hitchhiker in life
    but you’re invisible on the road
    a reverie
    looking back only revives animosity
    pretending what the future will hold
    drives you to insanity
    pictures play before your eyes
    teasing you with its ghastly entrails
    conformity is intangible
    uniformity is unseizable
    only gaze upon the possibilities
    never touch the destiny
    that could have been yours




    Submitted on 2005-01-23 18:22:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this is good and i like it a lot
    hte line wgere you say "the dust clogs my lungs" is so realistic and reminds me of mass murders!
    | Posted on 2005-05-30 00:00:00 | by blahblahgurl | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmmm..this piece is good, but I felt that some lines could of been worded better and other lines could of been transitioned better to the next.
    | Posted on 2005-01-23 00:00:00 | by Raksha | [ Reply to This ]



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