People aren't analgesics
to be used
every four hours
to ease your pain.
You use me
but in time
I'll break apart
like a pill
in a stomach,
but those lucky tablets
don't have to feel.
Hi Amy, You know aspirin is wonderful stuff. As I have recently discovered, there are three dangers to using it though (and three are enough to kill ya dead)... ONE: it really irritates the stomach lining and can therefore help cause ulcers or at least exacerbate the symptoms TWO: aspirin poisoning can kick in unexpectedly at any time and without warning, is hard to identify and deadly THREE: It slows the clotting of blood, I recently almost blead to death after a simple operation because the wound would not stop bleeding due to taking of pain killers. My advice to your speaker then; be an aspirin - you'll kill the busterd sooner or later.
I think this is and interesting way of confronting ,shall we say the up & downs of relationships. Though I must admit it is not what I expected from the title but that's ok, I enjoyed the read anyway. !Doc~
very good way of putting it. Yes often people use others as a remedy for themselves and ar so stuck in their own world they do not stop to see what it does to that person. Tissues are throwawya not friends. Well put
It's been a while since I walked down the cuddledumplin path of poems, and I am painfully reminded why I spent so much time here in awe. Memories... This was a (I hate to sound so terrible, but hopefully you'll understand) typical you write. It has all of the elements. The minimalism, the very clear point illustrated in a clever manner, the distance followed by the intensely personal confession.
But of course, this is as different form your other pieces as it could be because you are creative, and probably terrified of treading the same path over and over again as we all are.
I found the use of "needed," followed a few lines later by "wanted," quite telling. At first they seem like synonyms, and I didn't notice their separateness. But on a second read, they are glaring. "Wanted" betrays a childish greed, and at the same time, a willingness to be wanted and used.
I've written this in my journal in sloppy upset letters too many times before.
This is written in a way that suits its subject matter well. Like the ticking of a clock counting down to the next dose that is needed ever more. It is quite remorseless in that respect I think and I like the analogy of being the analgesic the spiritual sticking plaster and that what you can give and the amount of stickiness that you have is a finite resource. Yes it opens a whole can of worms: who cares for the carer? I like that and it gives this piece an edge. I would prefer to see 'I'll disolve' simply because to me it conjures up a slower form of bile-induced pain. The last two lines rather drew me up short and I suppose I felt as though I'd been short changed in some way. They just don't strike me as being as eloquent as those lines preceding them. But it doesn't matter because I know what you mean. Later, K
whew. this is different. used every four hours is really great.
the solution to being used as a pain killer could be to use a pain killer - so as not to feel. or perhaps an antacid to protect from the stomach! or to peel back the paint in the drawing to get everything real and drug free.
I guess most of us are guilting of keeping our little human pills hidden away in our handbags - to be popped at our convenience. I know I'm cerainly guilty of relying on certain people for specific reasons so perhaps that's why I relate to it. Brilliantly written. I wish you would publish your work!
I love the shock factor I get after reading it. Like if I was the person you wrote this to who was using you I'd say something like "She did not just say that to me!" LoL I agree with everyone that has commented before on your great metaphors and word play. You hit on so many good topics in ways that others wouldn't think of. Your originality is all your own and no one can even compare to it. You really have it! :) I loved it as usual. Great job! :) -blt
I thought this was exellent. The comparison between a person and a pill was very true. Sometimes people can feel used... and some people are real [censored]s for using others for a little bit of happiness in their time of need. Nice write.
This reminds me alot of Caustic, that you wrote way back and which is still one of my absolute favorites on here. Maybe I have a secret fetish for drugs and pills, eh? Anyway, I love that honest style with the powerful images; that's got lots of impact on the mind and on perception.
Rightous!! I really dig it when you bust out with the short ones....I guess maybe cause I have a short attension span. ha ha ha. Pills...more drug refference, and done so well. Really this was great...short with so much girth to the meaning. (whoa that sounded nasty..oops) I'm a dork.
both of these are really good and the feeling/mood of them seems to go together but i wish you would post the first separate cause it just blew me away, it was really fresh and unique and eye-opening. it's a favorite.
i could sure use one of them pain killers right about now! that is clever, using the pain killer as a metaphor for using a person to kill your pain. people can certainly become addicted to people, using them just like a drug. this is clever of you, but that doesn't surprise me!
sometimes drawings do look more animated than real life and jump out at the page with their bold colors. hard to live up to that sometimes in real life. but you are anything but a vacant sketch, as i've said before. you are clever little cookie, you are!!! :)