My Music of Memories -------------------------------------------
Every tone I sing
Is a different person from the past.
Every pitch on key
Is another situation that didn't last.
Sometimes my heart feels too crowded,
And something rumbles deep inside of me.
Out pours my ballad,
My music of memories.
Nice. Very deep and thought provoking for such a short piece. I did get the feeling though that it was summing up too large a number of lifetime events into a single chunk of text.
Excellent Jess! :D Freaking Awesome job girl! Memories. . . and Music. Lifes little blessings. It would be a shame if we couldn't remember things or have music to influence our life. You've brought both subjects in and created a very warm, heartfelt piece. The transition was great. Every thing I read from YOU gets better and better. Yes, it really does! Excellent job. I really love it. -blt
Well done! I like this one! Remembered people and situations become music, ballads, songs that tell stories, of those people and happenings? Just terrific! Very nearly a song unto itself. Alter it a bit and you've got a chorus. The rhyme scheme is good not too moony-Juney, if you know what I mean. This poem gives insight into the creative process of song-writing, how our experiences influence what is created.
Short and sweet indeed...it's rather phantom of the opera-esque. The rhyme scheme is very appealing :) the first four lines are particularly eye-catching, as it switched between a reference to music, then something more personal, then a musical reference again. Nicely done.
It was nice short and freakin awesome. I love music and singing though i suck at creating it and i suck at singing, this poem was wonderful. I really liked and i'm going to check out your other writings as well, adios. Chon
this was a nice, short piece. i liked it for it's shortness, it wasn't full of everything, there wasn't too much, there was just what it needed. very nice, and i liked the metaphor with music. good work;>
Nicely written in such a very short format. I have to say I loved the fact of our memories being a song...of i times where things didn't last as you said in the poem. I don't know, there is just something about this that caused me to stop, to think, my heart making another beat. Truly despite its size (since when has size mattered anyway) it had me going right to the end and even afterwards.
Every tone I sing Is a different person from the past. Every pitch on key Is another situation that didn't last.
This was an excellent beginning, just sort of tossed me right into the ideals you were portraying in this poem and it amazed me. I'm not sure what else to say, because if I sat here typing up how much I enjoyed this one I would ramble on for hours and probably end up repeating myself several times in a row and I'm sure you don't want that. Just keep up the good work...because this one is excellent.
That was beautiful... short but sweet. I love music, and I love the way you described this with amazing rhythm, and you rhymed very well without straining the piece. I wish you would continue this, although it seems very completed.
Submission Name: My Music of Memories
Memories. . . and Music. Lifes little blessings. It would be a shame if we couldn't remember things or have music to influence our life. You've brought both subjects in and created a very warm, heartfelt piece. The transition was great. Every thing I read from YOU gets better and better. Yes, it really does! Excellent job. I really love it. 
