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    dots Submission Name: she's alrightdots

    Author: rounin
    ASL Info:    17/f/USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 122/113/21
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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       Spur of the moment, quick writing. Not revised much, I didn't think it needed it...tell me if I was wrong. my bad if it is too self-pitying, I try to stay away from that. but sometimes fail.

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    dotsshe's alrightdots

    She walks alone
    and you can see her
    but you don't know she's there
    and she's alright with that.

    She's quiet
    doesn't talk much
    not even to her friends
    that once she laughed with
    They hardly notice her now
    but she's alright with that.

    She doesn't know what you think
    yes, she wonders
    but whether you admire her
    or wish she was dead
    she's alright with that.

    You've no idea what she's done
    what she's betrayed
    or who she's hurt
    sometimes she wishes
    that you'd understand
    but she'll keep quiet
    and smile at your ignorance
    because she's alright with that.

    She's quiet
    about the pain she feels
    She knows that with such anger
    the pain is not unwarranted
    So when you see her
    and notice her face
    she'll look at you in silence
    and know how lost she really is
    and when she walks away
    she'll wish
    that she could be alright with that.

    Submitted on 2005-01-24 10:08:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You have such a way with words...you make me feel every one of them. This poem is beautiful <as are the others>. I loved the last verse.

    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this very much, and I can really relate to the girl ion here. I loved the way you made it flow and hope to read more from you really soon.
    | Posted on 2005-04-13 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]
      The end is what caught me on this piece, how it vividly tied everything that was previously written into a whole entity. It was a masterfull finish, definitely one that could only come from something as true and natural as spurt of the moment. I rarely edit anything I write for the sheer sake of saving it from societies instilled doubts and criticisms that harbor in the mind and make you change the very will you sought to expose in the first place. Great work, you have so much talent, it's truly astonishing.
    | Posted on 2005-02-14 00:00:00 | by majinkenshinamv | [ Reply to This ]
      I too can really relate to this, only I wish I could be alright with that. It's no fun being the one on the outside looking in, although I do my best to convince myself it is...telling myself I don't need them and i'm alright on my own...yeah, you don't care.lol. but no, i don't think it really needs revision i think you did an awesome job with out it. Excelent Write
    | Posted on 2005-01-24 00:00:00 | by painofthanatos | [ Reply to This ]
      sadly enough i can relate to the girl and im alright with that. idk what it is that makes people feel okay with everything that theyve lost but you sure know how to explain it . good job.
    | Posted on 2005-01-24 00:00:00 | by broken_dreamer | [ Reply to This ]

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