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Hot Topic Whore


Author: painofthanatos
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Sorry Dave, I went off on a tangent, I had to do it. can you forgive me?


Hot Topic Whore



Oh My Gawd
The other day on MTV
I thought holy s***, this is me
There was this really awesome guy
From a band called AFI
He had this awesome long black hair
It came flowing all the way down to there
And Carson told him, damn that's hot
I knew I could do that, right on the spot
So I went to the mall
And I stood up real tall
And slowly made my way into Hot Topic
Sarah came and everything was catastrophic
She tried to persuade me back into Ambercrombie and Fitch
But my plan succeeded without a further hitch
I came with my daddy's credit card
So the transition wouldn't be hard
I bought everything in sight
Finally I had found the light
I thought I'd be the coolest kid in the entire school
Instead I turned out looking like a fool
The preppy kids didn't have my back
And the goths wouldn't cut me any slack
They hated my Simple Plan shirt
Threw my GC lunchbox in the dirt
They told me I was a phony
But they didn't even know me!
I was true way down to the core
I wasn't some 'Hot Topic' whore
No, not me, I'd been loyal for years
Their just scared I make them face their fears
That some day all their bands will sell out
And all the preps will converge with out a doubt
The hate and rage they've given to this label
Will all become a 'back-in-the-day' fable...
Oh My Gawd
Kelly Clarkson was on MTV
And I thought holy s***, this is me...




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  AFI is my favourite band , so um, i'm just going to leave this alone. all i have to say is don't knock it till you try it.
| Posted on 2005-05-07 00:00:00 | by jinx | [ Reply to This ]
  holy poop nuggets that's awesome! wow, i'm glad i found this one, and i'm even gladder (<-yes, i know that's bad grammar) that you wrote it! reading along i was like "yeah, this is really good" and then i got to those last 3 lines and i am in-freakin-pressed! awesome awesome awesom. one little housekeeping thingy: "Their just scared I make them face their fears" needs to be "They're just scared I make them face their fears". great job ;)
| Posted on 2005-05-03 00:00:00 | by treybur | [ Reply to This ]
  lol i like that. It was funny AND creative. That is awesome. I love the way you ended it too, that was good. PeaCe

* nikkki
| Posted on 2005-04-18 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
  Now sometime in everyone life we try to live like another or be something we are not and we get over it and move on. I love being Ed.24/7/365 even with all my flaws and my friends actually love me because I am so true to myself and to them.

I like your cool twist at the end,bravo

Anytime you have people commenting with passion, you know you did something right.
| Posted on 2005-04-08 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
  well i don't see how this can be a comedy but it is a good way to show how outcasts are played into society these days. but anyway i really liked it. escpecially how you used goths and preppies. and how they infest all our F**KING SCHOOLS... sry done... no really i have to go sry i would coment more but i have to go. THNX

- Nammy
| Posted on 2005-04-04 00:00:00 | by Namlooc20 | [ Reply to This ]
  well, this is different. a poem through the eyes of a poser. i don't mean to sound mean if this is about you or a friend, but it is true. i have never read anything like this before, it was very creative. it seemed full of emotion near the middle, it was very good, and got kind of funny near the end and the last lines. good work.
| Posted on 2005-03-29 00:00:00 | by Podenco del infierno | [ Reply to This ]
  This is too funny. I really like it even though it might haved stirred up a little trouble. I don't think it's Fed up at all. and I like the title. Nice
| Posted on 2005-02-10 00:00:00 | by DreamInColour07 | [ Reply to This ]
  ok. I don't want to hurt the feelings, but I hate to say it, there are groups in this world, we can acknowledge them or just go our own way. I was always the freak in high school and never really talked to anyone and when my family tried to force me to prep up I hated myself... Just because you see someone on tv that looks cool doesn't mean you should be like them.. It is your life though... You should do something that isn't just a phase. I'm not sure that this is a true life story, but if so, then you should be proud of who you are! If you feel that you are a different way, then make some new friends if you aren't getting alone well with the others... Sorry, it's probably bad advice, but I just decided to be my own person and wear whatever the H3LL I wanted to, I didn't give a rats bum what anyone thought! That's still the way I am now and I'm fine with it... They can laugh, and stare, but when I'm successful they will fear me...
| Posted on 2005-02-03 00:00:00 | by Besu | [ Reply to This ]
  I love this! Made me laugh so much My school is pretty small, and there are only 3 gothic kids there...only one of which is a true goth and the other 2 are just posers. We also only have 2 Hot Topics in the whole city (Orlando, FL...sad, I know).
The flow was pretty good, but some of the rhyming was a little forced, not that I suggest you change anything, because in my point of view, it would throw off the poem. Although, I do recommend you go back and add punctuation and clean up a bit on your grammar.
This is going on my faves!
-Azrael
| Posted on 2005-01-27 00:00:00 | by Tears of Azrael | [ Reply to This ]
  damn that was [censored]ed up, sorry but that was. if someone is really willing to do something like that just because one else said it was hot that person is a damned fool. who were you trying to fool? im sorry but if you were something else and suddenly changed over night i would be like the goths school. im not saying i am a goth or a prep im a middle person. but i don't know that's just stupid. anyways sorry for yelling it's not like you really did this, maybe. but i just had to let out my feelings about it. anyways keep writing.

dani...sorry!
| Posted on 2005-01-27 00:00:00 | by DenyAblecure | [ Reply to This ]
  hey haha i can imagine just about every person in our frikin school thats like this. i thought this was funny, but the rhymes maybe a little tooo forced. haha funny still, but preppy people unite is my favorite. that was just a work of art hehe
sophie
| Posted on 2005-01-25 00:00:00 | by sudie | [ Reply to This ]
  Oh Hott Topic... Or should I say Trendy 80’s Store. Lolfull! Naw- I’ll admit- I shop there from tyme to tyme. Clearence rack only- who knew punks and goth kids could spend so much $$$ on a pair of pants! Not when I was in highschool! Punk meant poor. Salvation Army shopping. Not rich parents buying you fashionable clothing. Hey! Anyways- funny poem. Tru story? Or comic effect? Nice title too- I always lyked the ppl all decked out in Hott Topic gear at the Mall- looking lyke walking Hott Topic Billboards! Lol...

Peace, love and impossible underpants- ~#6-
| Posted on 2005-01-24 00:00:00 | by Six_Grey | [ Reply to This ]
  i love this** what a great display of high school mentality. also i must apologize for the last comment i left you, i may have jumped the gun on that one, been a little edgey lately, sorry** but this is great! i think the whole thing went together so damn well. Hot Topic is a big store here too and yet people hate to admit the actually shop there, i don't get it. they have some cool [censored] there**
| Posted on 2005-01-24 00:00:00 | by _winky_ | [ Reply to This ]
  Okay, it's been a while since I have been in High School (not TOO long, but a little bit), but this made me so vividly remember the style changes, and how something that I really felt looked SOOO stupid suddenly becomes cool and I find myself having to dress that way to fit in. Then, I decide to be anti-establishment, to heck with fitting in, so I started fitting in with the anti-establishment crowd.

But hey, there's nothing wrong with GC and Simple Plan right? I mean, they sold their music to be in a video game.. that's kewl, right dawg? :)

Excellent write.
| Posted on 2005-01-24 00:00:00 | by jer | [ Reply to This ]
  damn you... that was suppose to be my idea.. you stole it... I'm so sad now I have to come up with somethign of my own... trhat's totally not cool. although it did make me laugh my damn ass off.. it's so fun because all the gc kids are like that down in canada.. there all like hey man you don't know music do you.. gc will never sell out.. and I'm all like okay there moron there the second biggest punk rock sell out in the world next to green day of course.. ha green day what a joke... I like this piece alot very rhymey sorta thing and it worked although what is hot topic.. I don't think that we have that here in canda.. which would suck if it didn't sound like such a fake store... lol
| Posted on 2005-01-24 00:00:00 | by bleedbroken | [ Reply to This ]
  oooohhh... not so fond of this... ouch... AFI is my favorite band...I don't really got much to say... :shakes head in dissapproval: OUCH.
| Posted on 2005-02-02 00:00:00 | by ViCiOuSWrItEr | [ Reply to This ]


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