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    dots Submission Name: Reminding Consciousdots
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    Author: Paconess1006
    ASL Info:    16/M/Charlotte, NC
    Elite Ratio:    3.11 - 99/126/46
    Words: 196
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 291
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    Description:
       This was written in a time where I thought I could return to my ex and somehow have a back up at the same time. Too bad it backfired and caused me alot of mental anguish, in which I wrote this. I'm telling my ex that my guilt was getting the best of me and how sorry I was. And yet, another bad mistake. Read on.


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    dotsReminding Consciousdots
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    Remind me
    why I decided to leave you.
    Come find me,
    unveil to me what's true.
    The vision I once did see
    has become untrue.
    My subconscious
    has become monstrous
    it looms about us
    with a stout look of mistrust,
    like I've mistreated you,
    liek I didn't take care of you
    when there were times
    when i was practically dying from you
    just so you would see the sun shine.
    But, My dear Jiminy, how could you?
    when I needed help, you were there,
    when I asked for advice, you were there.
    But when my heart was cracking, you left
    leaving the blank stare to cover my face
    and blemish my soiled tears after.
    My conscious
    has become unrelentless,
    and yet I express to impress
    to make sense of my nothingness.
    I've strayed from myself
    stepping away from the box
    travel into the great unknown
    tracking me down like the prized fox
    stealing the forbidden sheep
    and removing them to his lair
    all during the shepard's sleep
    under rules no longer fair.
    But now it's time to reset,
    time to forget the regret
    for the will inside me is just.
    It has become lost from us.




    Submitted on 2005-01-24 14:32:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this was good, a bit confusing at times, but that's ok. i think that getting back with an ex is not always a great idea, especially while keeping someone else on the backburner* but you gotta do what you gotta do right?! all in all i think this was written good, sorry you had to go through that though, it sucks****
    | Posted on 2005-01-24 00:00:00 | by _winky_ | [ Reply to This ]



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