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    dots Submission Name: I let it happendots
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    Author: Quiet Clamor
    Elite Ratio:    5.88 - 128/123/37
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Rant/Longing
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    Bytes: 805



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       Well... this isn't really poetry or anything. Just.. well.. random thoughts. Quite a few of my recents have been about this >.<

    Ah well, I'll get through it. Right now I just need someone to relate!


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    dotsI let it happendots
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    I feel as if something has been stolen. Maybe it's just my sanity. Maybe I'm just lost and confused only in my head. "Your just being paranoid. Your just fine," says the therapist trapped in my mind. I wish I could shake them out like water in my ears.

    Now I'm watching you, your dark clothing and dark hair next to him. That's all anyone sees you as, dark clothing, dark personality. Maybe that's just what I think of you as. Why is he so fond of you? Why did you have to come here? Are you some kind of test? He used to look at me with big green beautious eyes, now... no.. they are not fixed on you. I'm going to fight back, you just watch.

    Now, it's even... although... I long for his eyes full time. And, I know you do too.




    Submitted on 2005-01-24 15:31:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hmm talking about this girl again. Well you're writing was very well placed and I could almost taste the tension and anger in the words written here. But I hope you get through this little ordeal well and that perhaps in the end you come out on top. If though, this guy is really happy with the girl, I wouldn't end everything totally. Unless I am misunderstanding and the two of you don't have a friendship I don't know. But I have been in sort of the same situation with you, except it was obviously over a girl. I didn't exactly get the girl, but in the end you sort of learn to deal with it I guess. The first time you face a problem it seems like its unending can never get over it, but you can make it through and I hope you do either way. Good luck and good write once again...

    -Geremy-
    | Posted on 2005-01-24 00:00:00 | by Geremy Smith | [ Reply to This ]
      Who the [censored] is you talking about, B? I don't really get it, who is this person, are you pissed off because some other [censored] took yo' man and he likes her better than you? I dunno, it sounds kinda...*Average* to me. If I were you I'd go slap this [censored], but if you really liked this guy you'd understand and accept that you want him to be happy(That is if you really like him) and you'd rather he be with someone else if that would make him happy than be with you. That is true love, willing to let the love of your life walk away because you know they'd be unhappy with you and let them be happy with someone else, because you love them and want them to be happy. Look at it that way. Be happy that he is happy with this new girl. Hi Brooke!(Damn I'm good.)
    | Posted on 2005-01-24 00:00:00 | by wordslinger | [ Reply to This ]


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