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    dots Submission Name: Not Coming Backdots
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    Author: loveispain
    ASL Info:    23/f/ME
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 283/198/51
    Words: 189
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 999
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    Bytes: 1188



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       Watching someone you love leave your life...it's hard. These were just some things i was thinking when it happened...


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    dotsNot Coming Backdots
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    Maybe there was something
    That I should have said
    An expression on your face
    That I should have read
    My crying won't begin
    To change it now
    I'd have you in my arms forever
    If I even knew just how
    You must have felt
    All of my love
    I begged and pleaded
    With Heavens above
    I'd have given anything
    For you not to go
    I released your hand, said goodbye
    Let it be so
    You had to have felt
    The pain in my kiss
    Your love, your life, your smile
    All I will miss
    Could you hear the sorrow
    In my voice
    I let go of our love
    I had no choice
    Does it matter
    That I love you
    Don't ever forget
    That you love me too
    Should I have held you tighter
    Kissed you longer
    They say what doesn't kill you
    Makes you stronger
    There isn't too much
    That I know anymore
    I know you left
    And walked out the door
    Somewhere deep down
    I know for a fact
    No matter what I do or say
    You my love,
    Are not coming back.




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      hmmm...Did he ever come back? You know, I bet while he was gone he went through some crap, maybe a lot of crap, but had your face etched in his mind, like a bad replica of Mona Lisa, you know...you can't keep your eyes off? I bet he survived...for you, so he could prove you wrong...so he could see you again, which I hope that he did. Good job though...and keep writing!!

    austin
    | Posted on 2006-10-05 00:00:00 | by austin | [ Reply to This ]
      First of all, I would like to thank you for that most appreciated comment you gave me on my piece entitled Gone. It was exceptionally difficult for me to write that particular piece. ...you probably understand my heart wrentching emotions however.

    This piece of yours is brilliant. Deeply sad, but brilliant. I could feel your pain... your desperation. Believe me, I know how you feel.
    I hope you're doing well. My heart truly goes out to you.

    One thing is for sure though...
    Your writing clearly expresses your emotional stresses and hopefully helps in releasing them to a certain degree.
    Your talent for writing is beautiful.

    Sympathy and love.
    Crystal
    | Posted on 2006-01-15 00:00:00 | by purely_complex | [ Reply to This ]
      So, I thought this was a pretty nice poem. Seems like you put alot of thought into it, and im sure you had alot on your mind during the end of that relationship [sorry, hope your staying strong] - I believe its always a habbit for people to look back and think "well, what if" ...but that just helpes us in the next relationship...
    | Posted on 2005-01-24 00:00:00 | by sone | [ Reply to This ]
      Its a good poem I don't really have much advice on the "Love" subject because, well, I guess i just choose not to. The flow is pretty good but I got caught in a couple places.

    But no worries, I can't even see where or why I got stuck could be because I am a wee bit tired.

    Good write. Bonnie
    | Posted on 2005-01-24 00:00:00 | by Krazy | [ Reply to This ]


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