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    dots Submission Name: Blinddots
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    Author: ria_pixie
    ASL Info:    21/f/va
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 74/95/26
    Words: 41
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 984
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Just something I wrote that I am still working on. Thought to put it on here to get your thoughts and any suggestions you have


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    dotsBlinddots
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    Blind
    Are you?
    Can you see?
    The hurt?
    The pain?
    The tortured emotions?
    Can you really see?
    What I hide?
    Who I am?
    Do you really see me?
    Are you blind
    Or Can you see what you do to me?




    Submitted on 2005-01-24 15:44:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i really like it its just for someone to feel your pain you have to share it with them and not be afraid of hurting them or yourself you know who i am and that i love you very much
    | Posted on 2005-03-21 00:00:00 | by palin_white | [ Reply to This ]
      as the last 3 poems i have read this so sad as well... i know the feeling about how someone can nhurt you so much and everyone is blind to the pain.. good job with this poem you caputered everything that needs to be said i think.. well in my opinion you did ..
    | Posted on 2005-01-27 00:00:00 | by Caroline_19 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey chic I am not really gonna say much and you know why. I liked it and to let you know how special you are your poem is the only one I am gonna read today, cause I feel like [censored].

    Later chicadee
    | Posted on 2005-01-26 00:00:00 | by ForsakenAngel | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the way you have twisted physical blindness onto an emotional level. I read the title expecting something on the former and it was a pleasant surprise to find such a twist.
    I like the rhetorical questions but I feel you may have gone slightly over the top. Just a couple would have enhanced the feelings and the power of their delivery but when reading this they feel weakened by the quantity.
    | Posted on 2005-01-24 00:00:00 | by Predator | [ Reply to This ]


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