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    dots Submission Name: In Feardots
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    Author: magickandie
    Elite Ratio:    4.34 - 190/168/37
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Trapped
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       I was sitting in a meeting with someone who terrifed me when I wrote this.


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    dotsIn Feardots
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    She is shaking and trembling,
    Prespiration beads upon her brow.
    Her breaths are coming fast,
    Her heart beats even faster.
    She has a sinking feeling in her gut.

    She sits fidgeting in fear,
    Folding into herself.
    Afraid to look up,
    To meet a single persons gaze.
    Terrified she'd recieve a black eye.

    Flashbacks with phantom beating,
    The tasyte of old blood fills her mouth.
    Though her demons are not in this place,
    They seem so real,
    It's more than she can take.

    Keeping the tears at bay,
    Unwilling to show any vunerability,
    Knowing she has failed.
    Unable to control her betraying body,
    She prays that no one notices.

    Minute into minute,
    Seems so long and drawn out,
    Watching the clock,
    Hoping she can hang on,
    Til the time comes when she can bolt.




    Submitted on 2005-01-24 19:15:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      What a great job you did of relaying the nervousness, anxiety and fear! Hopefully, you don't have to have a meeting with that person again for a while!

    Love, Peace, Joy!

    ps: love your icon it's beautiful!
    | Posted on 2005-05-03 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      DAMN!
    I started to feel nervous just reading it, I like pieces that draw you in, make you share the emotion the writter does. It's a really good piece.
    The only thing: Spell check your work.

    Receive not recieve.
    Taste not tasyte

    Sorry but it's a pet peeve of mine.

    Jaymi
    | Posted on 2005-01-24 00:00:00 | by theDevilsPocket | [ Reply to This ]
      wow... if there was more of a word here to describe this poem i'd use it...o wait there is fantastic, imaginative, beautiful, incerdible, amazing flow, great topic, nicely written, stunning, i could go on but then i would be taking up ALOT of your box space. its amazing how you can put someone into your piece and make the feel the hurt of this person and bring back so many memories for a person...great job
    | Posted on 2005-01-24 00:00:00 | by withouthope | [ Reply to This ]



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