Description: Everyone deserves to be told this. It's true. I hope you enjoy. There are some people I wish I could have told, but I was to late, and maybe so were you. But I am saying it to everyone now.
You have a nice message but I feel you could play with words a bit more, maybe introduce a bit more. I agree with the above comment that you could have done it in two lines. Seems like you have a spare tire attached to your haiku. Keep it up
When I saw that the type was haiku, I was expecting some imagery and was prepared to let my mind go wild. But my own haikus aren't anything like nature either so I can't really complain. I do agree that everyone should be told this because there are too many people that think life is nothing. By way of improvements, I think that the full stop at the end of line 2 should not be there so that it just runs into line 3. Thats it. Nice message!
i like this in the context of your introduction. when i just read it it was still good but then when i read that part and thought of people i wish i had said things too it hit me, the shortness of it, the haiku format makes it just a breath, maybe under your breath, what you'd say as they walk away.
Submission Name: Keep Going
