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    dots Submission Name: Butcher's Paperdots
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    Author: Brwnsknsam05
    ASL Info:    32/F/ Cuba
    Elite Ratio:    4.78 - 399/440/103
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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       A butcher's paper is known in England as a paper which lists things that you believe are ideal...so that's what I wrote about in poem form. My ideal world.


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    dotsButcher's Paperdots
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    My ideal world...
    Opens up, it yearns
    Awake. And unfearful
    Smiling in a peach flavored
    Cringe...beauty

    It has no jerks
    No broken hearts
    No sorrow or sadness
    Simplicity.
    The epitome of perfection

    Jump roping and hopscotching
    Playing hide and seek
    Shaping all things, beautiful
    Searching for the stability
    in the eyes of a child

    Expressing emotions
    With hugs and kisses
    Iceberg finger tips
    Filled with desire
    Printing the price of love
    On fallen leaves

    Reds and oranges
    Setting into a smile
    A spherical character
    Rising with yawning impatience
    A waking sun

    My ideal world...
    Filled with fools
    Foolish pettiness
    And shy tenderness
    Happiness in the eyes of the abnormal

    Normalcy is an over-rated word
    The normal are the minority
    The foolish, the independent party
    The different are left...the majority
    My ideal world...

    One foolish thought
    With fools full of hope
    And it's all right
    Because right is no longer abstract
    And wrong is for the lonely

    My ideal world...
    Full of broken promises





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      jeeez hun,

    broken promises?...who done it?! I'll get 'em! let me at 'em! for me, i'd rather have the abnormal people...first of all...i'm abnormal...which is cool, i talk to everyone, everyday, and tell them good morning, and what the society thinks is normal, is such crap, what do you think? It just seems that way to me. I'll agree with Dana...only love my dear...lol...only love. But i think as well that love is hard to come by...real love...don't you think...but that is the perfect world when you find it. thats what i think. Anyway, i'm mumbling now...take care...

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    brent
    | Posted on 2005-01-27 00:00:00 | by austin | [ Reply to This ]
      As a longtime fool (or freak as my circle of friends refer to each other), I love the idea of a world where fools rule and "normalcy" is the minority (though that would make foolish normal and normal abnormal, right? k. you're right. that's not the point).

    I like your world. Well crafted, full of color, vital, vibrant...what's not to like?

    (one minor issue...I think you have a typo in S4 L3 with iceberf)

    Nice work
    | Posted on 2005-01-25 00:00:00 | by deadndreaming | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, I guess that's the way a perfect world would truly look, but remember that without knowing sorrow and lies, we would never know what is happiness and truth...but the other thing is very true, love rule the world, and certainly only love can make this world to be ideal..:)
    The ending is impressive:
    My ideal world...
    Full of broken promises

    Thank you, it was pleasant to read it!

    | Posted on 2005-01-25 00:00:00 | by Dana | [ Reply to This ]


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