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    dots Submission Name: Chronicles of Night: Legacdots
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    Author: Dark_Dancer
    ASL Info:    18/F/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    3.44 - 174/164/96
    Words: 1046
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 260
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       I want to know first impression, any words or phrases that hit you, and your thoughts. I know that it's a long poem, and that to some that's not good; and I know that some of the lines are really long. I'm not looking for these comments. And if you have any questions, PM me.


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    dotsChronicles of Night: Legacdots
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    I.

    It's the differences in subjectivity
    Between who you are and what I pretend to be
    That holds the city rat within the endless
    Stinking pit of hell
    Feel the rain pourin' down
    Snowy drops upon the rolling plane
    And the wind silent wind ogrish wind
    Beats upon my face
    Sewer held within the backlash
    Cigarettes rotten meat unbrushed teeth
    And a slow and steady rhythm as the drum beats

    Wings given from the neck the back the eyes
    Not here inside this time watching waltzing
    In the silence above the fractured dream
    Above the nightmare careening out of control
    No more monsters with slitted, staring eyes
    Hiding in the forest waiting for their time devouring flesh
    Drumbeat steady, steady sensual rhythm

    Seed of spawn of wet wolf lurking in the house
    Smell the fur wet dog fur muddied, bloodied, oiled
    Screaming echoes off the walls of shattered mind soundless mind
    Only motion in these clouds my breathing
    Drumbeat faster, harder sensual rhythm

    Transcending the white fog pale fog fog of substance, soul
    To this tiny world tiny season tiny Eden
    Watching sun set, tides roll, birds call, beach sing
    Feeling cool summer breeze caressing cheek
    Petting hair, curling about the lost and broken statue
    Holding hands with phantom in a setting no one knows
    Drumbeat harder, faster slow

    II.

    Searching fierce islands lost time no time God's time
    For shrapnel from the taking tree
    Soul shards mind shards body shards
    Nothing fits together puppet splintered child murdered
    Cubist masterpiece like a broken shadow flitting
    Through the life past the life is this life
    With Darkness dancing inside the dawn's dying light

    Twisting ballerina elastic worn out listen to the bones
    Hollow spongy bones swaying as you stand fall to the warm, warm sand
    White twigs in the white sheet frost in the desert frost in summertime
    Lost voice laughing come find her come dance with me
    Dark force melting frost away teeth within the veins
    Poison numbing anesthetizing carry me away
    Darkness dancing inside, outside darkness feeding

    Never the same mind rests never forgets
    What it was I lost
    Forget the time forget the name forgetting everything
    But don't wake from the comfort of the nightmare
    Can't forsake what I have known what I am vicious immortality
    Even watching all the time
    Darkness dancing inside, outside stealing

    III.

    Own the name the darkness gave
    Never say it whispered sin running from the sun
    Only shelter the night fright my pain
    Holding tight to a forgotten dream only shred of reality only tie to what used to be
    The Sunlight beckons and the Darkness holds me tightly, fearfully as the Sunlight calls

    Fear of mortals golden lives
    Unsure of what to do
    One ray of hope in the tall tall grass
    Listen for the snake to wander through
    Lust for blood white-hot longing ember-red pang of need
    Look to the innocent child cut her make her bleed
    Sunlight beckons darkness tenses sunlight calls

    Phantom cast hollow eyes to pregnant skies
    Waiting for the master wet wolf pale fog
    To descend and kill
    Whipping winds that temper stance
    The bough breaks child dies
    But no the answer has been heard
    Sunlight beckons darkness tenses dawn

    IV.

    Unsteady wind asthmatic wheezing cold
    Rain slides through the oil smell of then fear of now
    Liquid ray embracing
    Green bud bursts through parched river bed
    Straining sound of beast
    Dancing in the forest
    As the Light breaks through the Darkness and barricades it out

    Crystal walls of steel soft pillow for my head
    Spinning in the still rage soft and violent storm
    The captive river bursts the dam
    Torrential flooding higher land
    Can't escape the enevitable caught trapped dead
    Light shines darkness wanes holding out

    Night my love we've come so far
    And I'm so far away from you
    Remember the moment teeth sank in cut aorta river red
    Within the forged steel vice and terror
    Looking back upon this cure for death removing poisoned threads
    Light shines darkness wanes holding out

    From white-black to the mystic lights aurora singing
    Take the hand of fate and dance
    Turn the table on the most famed gambler
    Read the tarot star signs Holy whisper
    Not the pet
    Goodbye, my wolf my pale fog my diseased and dying master
    Light shines darkness wanes freed




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    ||| Comments |||
      This was delicious - a real feast for the senses (I've always wanted to say that...). To me it sounded like a stream of conciousness, just typing the ideas that came to your head, but if there was a deeper theme behind it, id love to know. Lines that screamed pleasure to me were
    'It's the differences in subjectivity
    Between who you are and what I pretend to be'
    'For shrapnel from the taking tree
    Soul shards mind shards body shards'
    And 'Night my love we've come so far'...
    It really was a beautiful ride of imagery - sometimes dark and painful, sometimes horrific, sometimes hopeful and delicate. Maybe Im just in a weird mood, but this is going in the favourites. Well done.
    | Posted on 2005-05-29 00:00:00 | by Von Django | [ Reply to This ]
      I like some of the imagery you painted, the way you used your words and repettition. It was quite and interesting read, there isn't anything i can really think of to change, it seems kind of dark kind of not, slightly tesited angles or something. Still somethign interesting to read.
    | Posted on 2005-01-25 00:00:00 | by Mercy December | [ Reply to This ]



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