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    dots Submission Name: Home Is Where The Heart Isdots
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    Author: elitegundam
    ASL Info:    25/M/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.25 - 68/90/20
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Poetry/I am dead inside
    Total Views: 218
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       What are you looking for in terms of feedback? Any background information behind the piece? Hints? Is this just to vent? Emotional state while writing?


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    dotsHome Is Where The Heart Isdots
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    Home is where the heart is,
    what else can fill this void?
    A black hole beneath my skin,
    hidden behind my ribs, it's dragging me in,
    pulling me toward the deep blackness,
    an eternaty of dark, how can I exist?

    A place to sleep, but not a home.
    All day I walk, explore, and roam.
    A bed at night, it's not enough,
    I need a place to call my own.
    An empty room is all I need,
    not stuff, or people, just a place to call home.

    My life is quickly draining,
    bleeding where my heart should be.
    The days drag on, weaker I grow.
    If home is where the heart is,
    how much longer will I survive,
    when both are absent from my life?

    What else is there for me to do?
    Alone, no place for me to go,
    I don't just need a place to stay,
    I need somewhere to call my home.
    Each day is like a gift for me,
    I don't know how I'm living, without a heart.




    Submitted on 2005-01-25 13:21:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      general advice... holy shi* that's a tough one.. I think that you need to step back from what you do and take a long look at your life... there's always answers in our life were all just to busy worrying about the past or the future that we don't take the time to look at the present and what it can do for us.. the answer's right in your face you just need to step back and take a good hard look... don't worry to much about everything in the future until you've figured yourself out right now... I hope this help's someway.. I'm nott he best advice giver but I thought that I would give it a try... good look. in all you do.
    | Posted on 2005-01-25 00:00:00 | by bleedbroken | [ Reply to This ]
      general advice huh? well let me see here, i think that you are definately looking for answers to your life right now. the need to find that love that makes you feel safe* to have that would be a place to call home. to have that feeling inside that all is ok as long as you are there* that is what i think you are looking for within this. like i said i am not one for lots of questions within writing, description is always a plus. get the reader to see themselves in your shoes, to feel that coldness and empy spot inside. most feel it already, but we all feel it differently, descriptive words* that's my advice, don't know if it made sense, but take it as you will.**
    | Posted on 2005-01-25 00:00:00 | by _winky_ | [ Reply to This ]



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