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    dots Submission Name: Beautiful Spiritdots

    Author: oixi
    ASL Info:    50/M/California
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 196/243/100
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I wrote this while thinking of a vision from the other world. If I ever see I ghost I think it will both frighten and excite me.

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    dotsBeautiful Spiritdots

    She swept across the floor as graceful as a
    bird on gossamer wing. Translucent veiled
    in a mist of shadows she drifted through the
    night. Stolen moments from a life long past
    her specter did mystery bring. Upon spying
    her I was split between emotions of lust and
    fright. Her glow like a candle lit the dark
    as she descended the stairs of the old,
    creaky place. In a wisp of smoke she
    floated on air in a flowing gown of white
    and long flaxen hair. She was a vision of
    horror and beauty in that house long vacant
    of a living face. I trembled with fear and
    longing as I watched this spirit so
    beautiful and so fair. My body stiffened as
    she passed through me and disappeared in the
    wall. My trembling ceased when this
    fabulous vision vanished from my view. I
    instantly wished for her to reappear in that
    vacant hall until dawn's light crept through.

    Jeffrey P. Tuthill

    2004 Jeff P. Tuthill

    Submitted on 2004-03-26 22:02:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That was a great description of an apparition. It really made a ghost a thing of horrific beauty, like how lucifer is supposed to be. A pleasure to read.

    | Posted on 2006-12-08 00:00:00 | by fryte | [ Reply to This ]
      I've always thought this also - I'd be scared and intrigued - sometimes though I've sensed I've seen otherworldly things even though they appeared to be mundane?!

    I really like this for content and format!

    Happy Thanksgiving!
    Love,Peace,Joy ~ Know,Experience,BE!
    | Posted on 2005-11-23 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Awesome write! I love this poem. It is well written and I really like your word choices. It draws a wonderful picture in my mind. You did a great job. Keep it up.
    | Posted on 2005-08-10 00:00:00 | by bgj | [ Reply to This ]
      Really beautiful yet hauting at the same time, and so many words and imagery to describe her misty translucant look. A captivating read.
    | Posted on 2005-02-27 00:00:00 | by xdollpartsx | [ Reply to This ]
      Konnichiwa! This is an awesome piece, it's beautifully written and gives the reader a great sense of feeling, almost as if it is happening to them. The only thing I'm saying is that it would have been a better poem if it was broken up into stanza's, but it's a great read either way.
    | Posted on 2004-11-13 00:00:00 | by Maki Kyomada | [ Reply to This ]
      AWESOME!!! I really liked the way you were so descriptive in your imagery and the way you wrote in a narrative form. Good job on this piece!!!
    | Posted on 2004-04-14 00:00:00 | by Dandan | [ Reply to This ]
      awesome. I think I'm going to have to read all of your poetry now.. you're from Japan? that's awesome... sorry anyone from my two favorite places: Ireland or Japan : is instantly cool... anyway I love it, You know what was really cool? The way you described her hair as being FLAXEN... it's not a term that's used much anymore so it kind of harkens back to ye old love songs... really neat effect. ~CW
    | Posted on 2004-05-09 00:00:00 | by Cora Windover | [ Reply to This ]
      Quite interesting. I can't say that I've ever seen a little ghosking (misspell intentional, that's what we call them at our house, I don't know why) and I'm not sure I'd like to. I'm frightened easily that way. ;)

    ~ Niphredil
    | Posted on 2004-03-26 00:00:00 | by Niphredil | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this its like ummm how do i put it the best way i can think of is awe inspiring, i love the imagery welcome to the site, im so jelous i wish i could write like you your great, keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2004-03-26 00:00:00 | by PryncessVynom | [ Reply to This ]
      aww. I like this, lovely flow/word choice. hmm ive alwaiiz been interested in ghosts but would preffer not to ever find one.. I wold preffer finding a vamp lol.keep writting
    | Posted on 2004-03-26 00:00:00 | by Exodus Night Sky | [ Reply to This ]
      I just cannot believe it, this is exactly what I saw while walking past an old burned out ruins along the river! When She paused her eyes met with mine and I saw a tear forming, She lifted a hand to reveal severed wrists then lifted her head to let me see the open wound on her throat.Then she called out a name really unaudible as she vanished into the burned out wall by the chimmney.Whaaaaahaahooooooooohahaha!
    Wierd, I liksed it1
    | Posted on 2004-03-26 00:00:00 | by Clayton | [ Reply to This ]
      I've always found an interest in the unearthly phenomenon. Very lovely intwining of fear & awe.
    | Posted on 2004-03-26 00:00:00 | by adias27 | [ Reply to This ]

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