She swept across the floor as graceful as a
bird on gossamer wing. Translucent veiled
in a mist of shadows she drifted through the
night. Stolen moments from a life long past
her specter did mystery bring. Upon spying
her I was split between emotions of lust and
fright. Her glow like a candle lit the dark
as she descended the stairs of the old,
creaky place. In a wisp of smoke she
floated on air in a flowing gown of white
and long flaxen hair. She was a vision of
horror and beauty in that house long vacant
of a living face. I trembled with fear and
longing as I watched this spirit so
beautiful and so fair. My body stiffened as
she passed through me and disappeared in the
wall. My trembling ceased when this
fabulous vision vanished from my view. I
instantly wished for her to reappear in that
vacant hall until dawn's light crept through.
That was a great description of an apparition. It really made a ghost a thing of horrific beauty, like how lucifer is supposed to be. A pleasure to read.
I've always thought this also - I'd be scared and intrigued - sometimes though I've sensed I've seen otherworldly things even though they appeared to be mundane?!
Awesome write! I love this poem. It is well written and I really like your word choices. It draws a wonderful picture in my mind. You did a great job. Keep it up. bgj
Konnichiwa! This is an awesome piece, it's beautifully written and gives the reader a great sense of feeling, almost as if it is happening to them. The only thing I'm saying is that it would have been a better poem if it was broken up into stanza's, but it's a great read either way.
awesome. I think I'm going to have to read all of your poetry now.. you're from Japan? that's awesome... sorry anyone from my two favorite places: Ireland or Japan : is instantly cool... anyway I love it, You know what was really cool? The way you described her hair as being FLAXEN... it's not a term that's used much anymore so it kind of harkens back to ye old love songs... really neat effect. ~CW
Quite interesting. I can't say that I've ever seen a little ghosking (misspell intentional, that's what we call them at our house, I don't know why) and I'm not sure I'd like to. I'm frightened easily that way. ;)
I love this its like ummm how do i put it the best way i can think of is awe inspiring, i love the imagery welcome to the site, im so jelous i wish i could write like you your great, keep up the good work. Pryncess
aww. I like this, lovely flow/word choice. hmm ive alwaiiz been interested in ghosts but would preffer not to ever find one.. I wold preffer finding a vamp lol.keep writting
I just cannot believe it, this is exactly what I saw while walking past an old burned out ruins along the river! When She paused her eyes met with mine and I saw a tear forming, She lifted a hand to reveal severed wrists then lifted her head to let me see the open wound on her throat.Then she called out a name really unaudible as she vanished into the burned out wall by the chimmney.Whaaaaahaahooooooooohahaha! Wierd, I liksed it1
Submission Name: Beautiful Spirit
anyway I love it, You know what was really cool? The way you described her hair as being FLAXEN... it's not a term that's used much anymore so it kind of harkens back to ye old love songs... really neat effect. ~CW