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    dots Submission Name: Somewhere across the oceandots
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    Author: reveries
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 54/74/23
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
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    Description:
       hmm....if anything this is another love poem.....enjoy


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    dotsSomewhere across the oceandots
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    Somewhere across the ocean, we made a place for us
    out of thoughts and dreams
    I still go there sometimes though it's withered and dead
    Sit on the stone bench by the lifeless roses
    Cry under the apple tree that once yielded beautiful blossoms
    plentiful fruit
    and shade from the harsh summer sun.
    Now it's bare
    twisted and rotting from the inside
    Like we were
    But sometimes
    Once in a purple moon
    I'll see him there
    walking by the dried, cracked lake
    Picking dead daisies
    Crying under the apple tree
    and I know, I'll never be able to leave this place behind
    Somewhere across the ocean




    Submitted on 2005-01-25 15:23:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It's hard to put something behind you when you have no closure, and to me that is what this sounds like...it sounds like a love was broken off and there were strings of emotion still attatched between the two of you...do your self a favor and cut them away.
    | Posted on 2006-03-08 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a great beautiful poem it rally sent me to that place across the ocean i got a great picture of it and i thought this poem was great! and i read ur comment on that one poem on how he was using that girl so i hope whatever happened to you ..you got over now..guys only think with their penis..well most do..then there are the select few that actually care..i hope you find one
    | Posted on 2005-01-27 00:00:00 | by grinninggashes | [ Reply to This ]
      this is beautifull* we all hold a memory when we lose someone. i am thinking this is a good display of the emotions left behind. yet they never really are, you have a place in your heart for them. and they have one for you. this is why i think you "see" him there sometimes. anyway, i like this. ***
    | Posted on 2005-01-25 00:00:00 | by _winky_ | [ Reply to This ]


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