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    dots Submission Name: Silverdots
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    Author: Emma_closes
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 88/111/44
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Sort of nonsensical in meaning, I know. I wrote very spontaniously late one night and the true meaning is actually sort of a you'd-have-to-have-been-there thing.


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    dotsSilverdots
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    you're just another junkie
    with silver-tainted breath
    I can see it in your eyes
    when you taste it on the air
    speaking Latin-lines
    and hoping it's not true
    the silver in your soul
    is all I am to you
    I'm loving your temptation
    because it's all you feel
    you can see me smiling
    and you dismiss the midnight air
    longing over silver
    in an endless victory
    dismissing me
    for loving you
    without a silver touch




    Submitted on 2005-01-25 17:43:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Got lost, in a good way, which is weird in such a short poem. like the addition of silver to what would be a run-of-the-mill love poem. try thinkin of poems that no-one else would write about, then you will aspire to be a great writer. check my poems out, i'd love to hear your veiws. luv and a smibble
    | Posted on 2005-01-26 00:00:00 | by The41stSmibble | [ Reply to This ]
      nice. this is very well written. Most of my ideas come to me at night...but I always say I'll remeber them...and I never do. I've gotta start writing them down! ne who...this is a wonderful poem!
    | Posted on 2005-01-25 00:00:00 | by MyKemicalfailur | [ Reply to This ]


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