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    dots Submission Name: When the cougar cries.dots
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    Author: Anarius
    ASL Info:    18/m/somewhere in Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 624/671/164
    Words: 224
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 337
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1343



    Description:
       by they way; the young girl, not actually a girl. During mating season, cougars will scream to search for their mate, and the scream sounds eerily like that of a young girl, just to clarify things.


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    dotsWhen the cougar cries.dots
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    The air carries the faint sound
    of an angel's frantic whispering,
    as he watches

    the star-dappled ghost walker
    swiftly drifting over the sky-lined mountains and trees.
    The far off voices of the wind-talkers encompass the night
    with their tales of love and terror.
    His tail flicks as he runs,
    caressing the air with the most graceful uneveness.
    His feet are opposed to the ground
    refusing to make contact as he strides across the death-strewn moss.
    The moon looks down, pale and afraid for this creature,
    this shadow.
    The skies begin to open, and they shed their tears for this moment.
    A tree flinches in the pain of claws piercing its flesh,
    but it does not resist, in hopes of redemption.
    170 pounds of the wind huddle on the highest limb,
    with teeth bared, and duel fires watching the forms below,
    as they bellow, and martyr his position.
    Far off the eerie scream of a young girl is heard,
    as a gun fires,
    a bullet pierces
    a heart stops,
    and a ghost's shadow falls to the ground.
    Motionless,
    it is finished,
    when the last tears fall.
    Tears so sharp the sky is torn
    when the cougar cries.





    Submitted on 2005-01-25 17:50:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Wow! I'm adding this one to my favorites! The imagery was great. I could imagine what it looked like. It sounds like you are very knowledgable and passionate about this subject as well. There were so many lines that I said "wow" to, I don't have any specific favorite. Overall, a great job!
    | Posted on 2005-02-01 00:00:00 | by elitegundam | [ Reply to This ]
      excellent imagery, youve got the materials necessary for a whole cartoon here. the rhythm was good too. i liked the way you presented it as a phrase-of-life thing.
    | Posted on 2005-01-27 00:00:00 | by serpentarius | [ Reply to This ]
      this was pretty cool. it gives you a vision of lions tigers and bears oh my! sorry i couldnt resist. i like dit and i thought the whole girl crying thing made sense as the cougar being all love me and what not. if that made any sense at all to you.
    | Posted on 2005-01-25 00:00:00 | by broken_dreamer | [ Reply to This ]


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