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An Ego Of Achievement

Author: the apocrypha
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An Ego Of Achievement

Themselves like
Words on bad paper
And seconds
Fly and land
Like drops of ink on a letter
To nowhere

Oh I believe
You know what I mean
Whatever you might achieve
Today doesn't mean a thing

Submitted on 2005-01-25 19:07:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  hmm...I like this...
I think, according to the mood I am in today...
that this is true
and this poem means something to me...
fruitless effort are so damaging
| Posted on 2005-03-10 00:00:00 | by Rubi_Roja | [ Reply to This ]
  Like the poem,but disagree with its contents.

Especially this part:
Whatever you might achieve
Today doesn't mean a thing

because these are memories that last a lifetime and not just for oneself but for others as well.
| Posted on 2005-01-26 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
  The title is ironic. I agree that some people have egos that scream "achiever," even when they may not have any or work towards any (I hope I'm reading this right).

And seconds
Fly and land
Like drops of ink on a letter
To nowhere

I also see that in the scope of things one bad day means nothing, but one day of slacking often turns into ten.

I like "Words on bad paper." I suppose that beats "Bad words on paper" or "Bad words on good paper."
| Posted on 2005-01-26 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
  i like this. if you really think about it achievement is all your ego most of the time. like i won a soccer game or something. idk to me it all gets annoying how people are omg im so awesome and btw [censored].
| Posted on 2005-01-25 00:00:00 | by broken_dreamer | [ Reply to This ]

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