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Red Roses/Splendor

Author: WaxingPoetic
ASL Info:    27 ~ Louisiana
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Words: 85
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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I don't really know where this came from, but I'm digging it, in a weird whacked out way. Doesn't seem very me but I guess that's the beauty of writing. Stepping outside of yourself.

Red Roses/Splendor

Your lips are my favorite memory
So red and soft
I just wish to touch my finger to them one last time
Ever so gently
So that I barely feel it
Beauty personified in that red sweetness
Soft as flower petals
Red roses
They are the heaven of your whole being
A cooling shade in the garden of you
Words gently spoken escape those lips
And they wrap around me
Like strong arms
But soft as flower petals
Red roses

Submitted on 2005-01-25 20:27:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like the line about words gently spoken wrap around me like strong arms. Very poetic and romantic. I don't know why you say this poem doesnt seem very you. What's wrong with having a side so romantic and beautiful. This is real art work here.
| Posted on 2005-02-04 00:00:00 | by spoken | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked this poem for a lot of reasons:
I love roses, my name should tell you that, and I deeply believe in the passion and splendor in a rose. I suggest that you read a couple of my poems "a kiss" and 'love". because they are similar to this one. I'm gonna put you on my stalked list. Keep Up The Good Work!
| Posted on 2005-01-26 00:00:00 | by Chi-Town Rose | [ Reply to This ]
  A beautifully erotic poem, especially if you read it upside down.

I like your poem, because, apart from any delicious innuendos ( which you probably weren't even aware your subconscious was feeding you) it is clear and easy to follow, not a jumble of arcane symbolism as some love poems are. This is sweet, gentle, feminine, a refreshingly nice poem.
| Posted on 2005-01-26 00:00:00 | by hanuman | [ Reply to This ]

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