That soft coffee hair lays just right. Your clothes are wrinkle free. The aroma you put off I canít resist
I love this part...It just kind of made me stare out my window and do that *sighhhh* that girls do ...This poem was filled to the brim with feeling and i love that !...I rarely enjoy anything that is technically correct and void of emotion ...but youve just managed to create it all ...i think this is great ...Beautiful ...passionate...ect ect and so forth
First off, interesting avatar. The poem? Awesome. Absolutely nothing to criticize - a breath of fresh air on a subject that's been torn apart by the incompotent. You created such an appealing atmosphere with this piece, that your words gave me goosebumps. Terrific work.
I love the way you started out with this line... but I was dissappointed with all the rhyming... I think the feeling you are expressing here is beautiful and honest... to me the sing songy .. rhyming nature of the rest of your piece takes away from your intention.
wow this sounds just like something i would write in one of my happy inspirational moods. you give much detail and the visuals that i got where amazing, i also loved the comparison of things that really didnt relate to the poem like the coffe hairs but it was refreshing. I think this just became one of my favorites
This is a fairly good poem. You provide very good visuals. The coffee colored hair, the body tingling with each touch followed by the tingly feel of some sort of magic being sprinkled upon your connection. This is a good write. Keep doing what ya doing.