You really need to stop being so O.D. Sike naw, this poem is hot as hell; I sincerely mean that. It actually has inspired me to write a poem; don't worry, you ain't neva lied when you said no one can touch your flow.
I liked your poem, I perceived from it that you are an independent woman and that no one can recycle what you have though or said because it is your creation. I enjoyed your poem because through it you allowed me to look at the depth of your soul, the trouble is we only got a peek but we long for more. I liked the rhythm of your poem and in itself it was a song. Everything in life is a song remember last year when we read the Pearl with Mr. Streicher well your poem reminded me of that. Remember though that everything that we think and everything we converse is the same thing that has been discussed since the beginnig of enlightenment and all we do is add to it.
Mmm, music of your soul...? I read (heard) it with the pleasure, this kind of a poem has such an effect on me...it just lifts me up to the sky...it's so dreamy, or maybe it just seems to be. It's easy to read and catch it. Well done!
you talk about your song something that seperates you from everyone else and i understand that but exactly what do you mean? do you mean your voice and the way you express yourself is finally out? im kinda confused but i like the arrangement of words it really flows yet the last 2 stanzas i think need a little work they are kinda rough. good work
Simple and sweet. It's communicating a lot- a feeling, a description, the song... it's bleeding with potential. I found it a little flat, and a little long. I would cut down on unnecessary words. Also -this is something I do, maybe you'll find it useful- look for adjectives and use them often. It's hard to describe a thing of beauty, but look for something to say about it other than 'beautiful'.
It's a good piece, something that could probably win poetry contests, but I think it could be a lot better than just good... just with some revision.