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    dots Submission Name: Light of Lifedots
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    Author: Anju
    ASL Info:    25/f/India
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 24/27/15
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsLight of Lifedots
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    Brings the sun with its jubilant rays
    Days filled with glory and grace;
    Nothing in the World seemed so bright 'n' light,
    As my life that dorned with such trait.
    Days passed by and so did years
    Stealing the glory,grabbing the light;
    I saw the darkness spread unto my life
    With the best laid plans of an in-house brain.
    Fell those pillars that stood untouched,
    Sank the ships of hope and faith
    From then did none see the light of life.

    Rose one day the most awaited sun,
    Bringing with itself unseen hopes;
    Showed the Phoebus a path with its rays:
    The rays that took us to glory and grace.
    The best laid plans went all in vain
    And the brain did die out much in pain.
    Thus proved "that" light, the Light of Life
    That victory is sure to those in despair,
    For these are the trials to the children of God!




    Submitted on 2005-01-26 12:38:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was a good write
    thanx for your comment on poems it is short and sweet i have written its long version as well i will submit it one day keep writing as i like reading as much as writing
    thanx sandman
    | Posted on 2005-01-31 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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