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    dots Submission Name: Atmospheredots
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    Author: Emma_closes
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 88/111/44
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 982
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       I never thought I'd be much into the whole "love poem" thing...but I guess you never know until you try it.


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    dotsAtmospheredots
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    he has eyes that make you feel
    like you've met somewhere before
    they pronounce themselves as if they were
    but two awkward pauses
    in a conversation
    amongst good friends
    that flowed down the gentle slope
    of his nose
    he sits surrounded by literature
    piled to each side
    as if it were all his
    as if the atmosphere were built for him
    his eyes made me want to
    say something...
    something; smart, witty, brilliant, cheerful
    exactly what he wanted
    because I could tell he had been hurt
    time and time again
    twirling the atmosphere around his finger
    as though it were all his




    Submitted on 2005-01-26 19:57:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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