Blood will flow by Rail

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Submission Name: Blood will flow dots

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Author:	Rail
ASL Info:	18-m-Washinton state
Elite Ratio:	2.27 - 117/80/13
Words:	109

Class/Type:	Poetry/Me
Total Views:	313
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	688

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Blood will flow dots

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Blood will flow
Blood will spill
Yet never will I die

The blade shines beside me
Foreword I move
No point, no purpose, no meaning

All I do is walk
On, and on, and on

Why do I do this
Why don’t I just stop
What is the point, what is the purpose, what is the meaning

Still I move, still I walk
I continue going
On, and on, and on

Looking, searching, questing
When will I find what I’m looking for
Find the point, find the purpose, find the meaning

Blood will flow
Blood will spill
Yet never will I die

Submitted on 2005-01-27 00:35:59 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  journey is the meaning, journey is always the point and purpose...putting aside philosophical debates...u can do better. not ur best effort. emotions are the key they are not the result...where is the result boy? u have the right key open the right lock...
Why do I do this
Why don’t I just stop
What is the point, what is the purpose, what is the meaning
very very bleaK... confusion and futility coming through but where are the words? they just keep running here and there. question marks missing at the end of sentences and its forward i move and not foreword...
Foreword I move
All I do is walk
No point, no purpose, no meaning
What is the point, what is the purpose, what is the meaning
Still I move, still I walk
I continue going
On, and on, and on
Find the point, find the purpose, find the meaning
do u see the repetetive monotony of all this...uv tried showing hopelesness and confusion in all this but the words are too impotent... try it simply perhaps that would help...just write pur emotions and not structured stanzas...try revising it again and again and ull see it flows well...keep faith keep writing.
| Posted on 2005-02-07 00:00:00 | by antara | [ Reply to This ]
  hmmmm... interesting. A little... flat if you get what i mean. But if you went and added a little more to it i think it would be awsome. It just seems a little unfinished like there should be more. But i can't quite put my finger on it... i like it though. great start! (for lets hope this is not the end.)
~Shadow
P.s. thanks for reading dance with death. I really appriciate the comments
| Posted on 2005-01-29 00:00:00 | by Moonshadow | [ Reply to This ]
  One question, U O.k? i suggest you see a shrink or something. I feel that now i know someone who is on the verge of suicide. Please tell me this isn't true because iu'll feel bad. Read my poems, they'll make you feel better. And remember life is good...no matter what!
| Posted on 2005-01-27 00:00:00 | by The41stSmibble | [ Reply to This ]
  By reading this poem i can tell that you tried to kill yourself already and if you didn't then i guess you are going through a rough time if this poem is based on your emotion not just something you pulled out of the hat but anyway i liked the poem great job.
| Posted on 2005-01-27 00:00:00 | by Draco | [ Reply to This ]
  I can feel the emotional turmoil... good work, I can relate very much... and that is what life is all about, we can never stop while still alive.. keep on going despite of the obstacles along the way...and keep on writing... and touch more souls.
| Posted on 2005-01-27 00:00:00 | by chatters | [ Reply to This ]

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