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    dots Submission Name: Memories far sweeterdots
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    Author: mixedemotions00
    ASL Info:    24/F/US
    Elite Ratio:    6.26 - 574/377/69
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 1052
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 932



    Description:
       Joint effort with magnicat!!! she wrote stanzas 2 and 4 and I added 1, 3 and 5. Let us know what you think-- thanks!


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    dotsMemories far sweeterdots
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    And so I go,
    with a wave and a hesitant glance.
    It would be so nice to go alone.
    It would be so nice to go with you.

    And I am caught
    with indecision at my back.
    Never one to just leave
    and go on a whim,
    I second-guess my need to walk away
    from you.

    I reconsider my need to stay.

    And for a moment,
    fleeting but true,
    my mind runs back to you.
    My hair hurries to follow, and it
    catches
    in the wind;
    I am wrapped in your arms
    like we are meant to be.

    Here is where the danger lies.
    For the past is glossed,
    and I will miss you
    far greater than I ever
    loved you.

    And so we part.
    And I am left with
    nothing less than
    regret,
    and memories
    far sweeter than any of
    your kisses.




    Submitted on 2005-01-27 01:06:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      not bad. not bad at all, my friend! i think we done good. i'm not sure of the title... hmmm.... perhaps "memories far sweeter..." i don't know. i'll have to think on it. for now, tho, "second guesses" works fine for me! thanks for the fun! it was inspirational and a good time.
    | Posted on 2005-01-27 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      HOLY FLIPPEN HANNA...yeah!
    I Love it...awsome write and I like the title...gives us that `'maybe' feel through out.
    And I am caught
    with indecision at my back.
    Never one to just leave
    and go on a whim,
    I second-guess my need to walk away
    from you.

    oh and

    And for a moment,
    fleeting but true,
    my mind runs back to you.


    Beautiful...I'd make no chages what so ever...
    it's all there.
    You have both pulled off a really good write from this collaboration.
    So happy to see a journal too...
    so happy right now...I'm off to read more,
    kelly
    | Posted on 2005-01-27 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]


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