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    dots Submission Name: My Life That Isn't Minedots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 722
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 530



    Description:
       This explains how there is a set way for people to live, a sense of conformity that is layed out. I wanted to write this and say that I just don't want that, I want the freedom to do whatever I want and to be whoever I want.


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    dotsMy Life That Isn't Minedots
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    I hate this life that you have lived for me
    I hate the hate that crwlas on my spine
    I hate the style and the conformity
    you take my life like it isn't mine

    I need the pain that you have caused me
    I need a life to call my own
    but with my needs come apathy
    and with my hate comes a bit of love

    I love this head that I am living in
    it's unfortunate that you can't see
    the only person I am dealing with
    is the person I call me




    Submitted on 2005-01-27 11:53:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow. This is a really good poem. When I first was looking at this title, I was like what the heck does this title mean. It sounds so messed up. But than I read this and now it makes perfect sense. But my only advise is to look it over cause I saw some spelling mistakes. Its not that you spelt it wrong. But the letters were out of order.
    Great jOb. This was a good poem
    stephanie
    | Posted on 2005-01-27 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, do you hear voices?
    I had to say that sorry. Anyways this is great. I feel like this every day of my life. I hate it and I want it to end. Being me is a [censored]. Creating a false reality is the way. I love this poem. Nice write. Do you write lyrics by any chance??
    | Posted on 2005-01-27 00:00:00 | by Abort_Chaotic | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this poem. It really makes you think. I really like how it ends. The only thing i might do is add a few lines to make the stanzas flow a little more.
    | Posted on 2005-01-27 00:00:00 | by Selene | [ Reply to This ]


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