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    dots Submission Name: The Dragondots
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    Author: marigold
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 182/203/89
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Dragondots
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    A wooden wall stares back at me,
    and lurking in it's depths I see-

    a dragon pulling on his chain,
    a dragon one cannot restrain.

    A lamp glows softly,cautiously,
    and mirrored in it's light I see-

    a dragon writhing in great pain,
    a dragon one cannot detain.

    A curtain ripples lazily,
    and in it's languid folds I see-

    a dragon pulling on his rein,
    a dragon none has ever slain.

    I raise my cold hand nervously,
    but close my eyes when I first see-

    a dragon one cannot contain,
    whose eyes conceal an awful bane.





    Submitted on 2005-01-27 11:58:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is a great poem.. you haved showen talent in this one i think. havent really got the inner meaning yet but even if there isnt an inner meaning its still great..just the story prospect of it.. so in my opinion great job. i have a friend who will love this to i am going to send it ot him.
    | Posted on 2005-01-27 00:00:00 | by Caroline_19 | [ Reply to This ]
      An inner bane this is better then the last on I read by you. I love banes so much its insane. Anyways. Nice ryming; rymings always fun.
    | Posted on 2005-01-27 00:00:00 | by Abort_Chaotic | [ Reply to This ]
      good job! I like how your poem rhymes without taking away from your poems meaning. I dont think i would change a single word.
    | Posted on 2005-01-27 00:00:00 | by Selene | [ Reply to This ]


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