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    dots Submission Name: Who's Whodots
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    Author: marigold
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 182/203/89
    Words: 31
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsWho's Whodots
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    What lies beneath we dare not look,
    for in the end things may reveal,
    the master for the slave we took,
    and thought the slave the master real.





    Submitted on 2005-01-27 12:00:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is a good poem its short though it would be nice to have more emotion or detail added.. i like what you havve though.
    | Posted on 2005-01-27 00:00:00 | by Caroline_19 | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah, this poem wasn't REALLY portaying anything. Should have added more. Can't stress that enough. Need more feeling let loose emotions of the master for the slave " we " took..? Doesn't sound right. Sounds like something you would say to be cool among friends who have no taste in poetry.
    | Posted on 2005-01-27 00:00:00 | by Abort_Chaotic | [ Reply to This ]
      the poem was good, but would have to agree with selene.. kinda unclear, the meanin, but was a good read, what i get from it is some people are greater thanothers nderneath , but stiil am not sure
    | Posted on 2005-01-27 00:00:00 | by ceestyl | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem is short and sweet I really like it. But you might want to add a few more lines because it is a little hard to get your meaning.
    | Posted on 2005-01-27 00:00:00 | by Selene | [ Reply to This ]


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