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    dots Submission Name: Dolldots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 39
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsDolldots
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    I feel like a broken doll
    that is supposed to wow children
    with her talking and movements,
    but the mechanism is broken
    and can never be repaired,
    so my dainty body
    sits untouched on a shelf.





    Submitted on 2004-03-27 05:01:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Again with the short and yet succinct verbiage. Very nice. The message of nelect was quite well displayed without being overdone.
    | Posted on 2004-03-27 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      it's true. so many dainty body do sit untouched on a shelf while those god damned bobble head creatures align every car dash board like monuments for thought, marbling around on confused necks.

    ghost.
    | Posted on 2004-03-27 00:00:00 | by myghostsliketotravel | [ Reply to This ]
      good mornig Amy,
    I hate feeling on display for everyne to look at and jugde but as far as interacting- ha. Nice write ans metaphor.
    jan
    | Posted on 2004-03-27 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      hahaha
    u must have really felt it so hard..
    any way.. need less to say..
    a nice write..
    keep it comming
    bye
    | Posted on 2004-03-27 00:00:00 | by rawpot | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, this is really good. It's short, but in just a few lines it captures the rearder's imagination. Great choice of words, too :)
    | Posted on 2004-03-27 00:00:00 | by Spirited | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the vivid image, and emotion that permeates the poem. Its melancholy, but not overly trite. Good job.
    | Posted on 2004-03-27 00:00:00 | by LadyChaos | [ Reply to This ]


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