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    dots Submission Name: I Stand Alonedots
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    Author: Paconess1006
    ASL Info:    16/M/Charlotte, NC
    Elite Ratio:    3.11 - 99/126/46
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Poetry/Alone
    Total Views: 344
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       Its a bit too depressing for me. Nothing happened. I'm just alone. I'm not usually, but for once... I am. And I don't like it.


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    dotsI Stand Alonedots
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    Even though surrounded by people
    I stand alone.
    Although willed on by others
    I stand alone.
    I have a place to come to, to eat and sleep
    A true home.
    But when home is always empty
    I'm still alone.
    What goes on behind my walls
    for I atone
    them eventually, and gradually
    I once again become alone.

    My heart longs for another
    because I'm alone.
    I've counted my losses
    from them I've grown
    But my winnings are shortlived
    and yet, I'm still alone.
    I look for the beacon of light
    I'm sure it once shone
    but its bulb must have gone out.
    For now, its gone.
    I cry out for another to reach me
    I'm scared of being alone.
    Crouched over in my little corner
    seperated from the world
    secluded in my own little self
    and yet no one comes to visit,
    and for this. I become alone.

    Sorry for repeating myself
    but I hear it echoing throughout my mind.
    Its something I can't escape,
    unless,
    I own up to responsibility,
    and refuse to be alone.




    Submitted on 2005-01-27 19:09:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i like the subject matter. but i think you shoulda tried to keep "i stand alone " as the second of every two lines that wasy the poem would have held together better. and the first seemed a little incoherent with the rest. i just wanted to say that i liked it but a little bit of correction could make it better.
    | Posted on 2005-07-01 00:00:00 | by BigPapaPaine | [ Reply to This ]
      "i think, therefore i am" you have to think positive to be positive. you cant think you are depressed and alone and expect to be happy. i can relate to this, because i felt alone for a while, too. you just have to surround yourself with people you can trust. maybe very few people at first, but you will build yourself back up. (yea, good write, too)
    | Posted on 2005-01-27 00:00:00 | by brokenroses | [ Reply to This ]
      Loneliness is scary. I used to be like that,to the point of suicide.
    But I found God. When you give yourself totally over to Jesus,you're never alone. He is ALWAYS with you even though you don't see Him. That's the best thing - Jesus loves us so much and He wants to care for us. You have a friend who knows you inside out,you don't have to say a thing. He won't judge you either. Complete perfect unconditional love.
    About the poem,it's a good expression of loneliness and how crippling it can be.

    | Posted on 2005-01-27 00:00:00 | by Maverique | [ Reply to This ]
      you can refuse to be alone though. I've found out, for myself anyway, that the only times I get depressed are when I let myself get depressed, and then I fall into this whole pity party thing, and think it all sucks, but somehow, I get worked out of it...I've got an awsome God that I serve, and He does amazing things...and through that i learned this, "Life is like cake, its as good as you make it" cause it truly is, your as happy as you want to be, sure, things happen sometimes, but its your final decision on how to react, and whether you want ot let it destroy you, and build you up. Anyway, just what I've learned, thanks for the write

    ~Anarius~
    | Posted on 2005-01-27 00:00:00 | by Anarius | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this write. Yeah it is depressing. Being alone is not a good feeling. It is a scary feeling. In relationship ways and other ways also. I think you meant it in other ways to. But I'm not sure. Someday, you'll be used of being alone. Well maybe someday. But it isn't always good to be taken. In some ways, you need your space and a time to relax. You no what I mean. By the way I loved the write.
    stephanie
    | Posted on 2005-01-27 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]



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