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    dots Submission Name: Distilled Thoughtsdots

    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 30
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsDistilled Thoughtsdots

    I took my verbose epic
    and distilled my thoughts.
    Now my story is pure.
    The good guy fought and lost,
    but it helped him grow,
    and he got the girl.

    Submitted on 2004-03-27 06:43:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      bout time the good guy lost. bout time fantasy played fair with reality! i love this one- like a delicate origami crane!
    | Posted on 2004-04-02 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]
      YES! I am always a fan of the lightly worded pieces. I think sometimes we try to be too fantastic in the imagery and lose sight of the meaning. WELL DONE!
    | Posted on 2004-03-27 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nice distillation leaving the bare bones of humanity open for the reader to look for more...
    | Posted on 2004-03-27 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      Nicely done. I can almost taste the epic thats hidden in there. The man being a hero, and doing everything he can...but it wasn't enough, but the girl loved him anyway...nice job
    | Posted on 2004-03-27 00:00:00 | by LadyChaos | [ Reply to This ]

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