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    dots Submission Name: DARK SKIESdots
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    Author: Rail
    ASL Info:    18-m-Washinton state
    Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 117/80/13
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/I am dead inside
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    dotsDARK SKIESdots
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    The skies are dark,
    There is no light,
    The clouds have rolled in,
    There is nothing but coldness,
    Coldness, darkness and numbness,
    Every where there is nothing but darkness
    How can there be such perfect darkness

    I look to the sky at least I think its they sky
    Then I fall to the ground and lay still
    I feel nothing but the numbness inside
    The numbness is all that fills the emptiness
    What do I need, what do I what
    All I can to is lay here and feel nothing




    Submitted on 2005-01-28 01:35:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      cool the more i read the more i think yer cool. i can feel exactly what yer saying but if i were u i think id look at the way you spelled somethings like in line 8 and line 13 its a bit distracting
    | Posted on 2005-02-04 00:00:00 | by Saphire Twiligh | [ Reply to This ]
      perfect discription of a death within. but could have made use of more bleak language. seems too narrowed in certain areas and restricted to coldness, numbness and darkness. it can also be symbolised with "fatigue, emptiness, hollowness, void or perhaps an eternity in shades of black" if u can relate to what i mean? p.s. would perhaps care to go through my piece " dead earth" sort of symbolises a similar idea
    | Posted on 2005-01-29 00:00:00 | by antara | [ Reply to This ]



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