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    dots Submission Name: Memoriesdots
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    Author: Dana
    ASL Info:    23/F/Dreamland
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 79/87/26
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 940
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    Description:
       Just some piece about memories...- our shining stars and frozen snowflakes.


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    dotsMemoriesdots
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    Memories are creeping over us
    Sending old letters
    Full of true sunshine,
    Full of dark shadows
    From the past
    Which is locked in our
    Memory and hearts

    Memories are creeping over us
    Willing us to recall
    All the good and bad times
    Fearing to be forgotten
    And left alone in the past

    We open them to read
    Once more these stories
    We have lived through
    Letters are whispering:
    Donít forget
    We are with you!

    Moments as photographs
    Black and white
    Colorful, glossy or frosted
    Taken in all the seasons
    Of our lives

    Technicolour light
    Is the best that we bear in mind
    Trying to leave the shadows
    In the hiding place of time

    © by DANA 2005




    Submitted on 2005-01-28 08:47:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Awesome. This sort of made me think of some event or place in one's memory that looms over them like a shadow, but not as a memory; rather as a regret that it's gone, and that it's about reliving it through the person's mind, because their memory is all they have left. But I loved the last stanza:

    Technicolour light
    Is the best that we bear in mind
    Trying to leave the shadows
    In the hiding place of time

    Awesome, especially that last line to tie it all up. Amazing job.
    ~Spire~
    | Posted on 2005-01-28 00:00:00 | by Spire | [ Reply to This ]


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