Description: Just fresh off a break-up. I mean like ten minutes fresh. Therefore, my mind was sort of clouded. But this is what came from it. Be nice, I'm very sensitive at the moment. (Just kidding) Bash it if you will.
Let Me Go -------------------------------------------
Trying to pull away
You're crying me back
Those tears will soon fade
Whether there is love is not the question
Our compatibility is however
Knowing that I need more than the physical things
Knowing that you can't provide
It will fade
Like my endurance, like my hope
Like our baby in your womb
You say can we make it work
Love works itself out
And it's working itslef out the door
Similar to how only the material things mattered
And how you failed to borrow my sorrows
And ease my griefs
And hold an intellegent conversation
I can't short change myself in sparing your hurt
This will not work
I let you know
Now, let me go
I hate it when the day comes that you have to let something go. And I ever so much know how it is to do that when a child is being carried in the womb.
When one can put their own welfare first...they may suffer from a short period of grief....but they will end up being stronger and happier in the long run.
Materialistic.....I notice those that are all about the money and the material and completely lose the emotion. You can only leave with that of which you hold inside of your soul...not that of which you hold in your hand.
I like your style and your flow it's not like all the other post you see on here. I hope you dont think I'm taking credit away but your style kinda reminds me of a good friends and well known artist. pm me if you'd like to see some of his work.
I like it, it has such feeling and depth. I know the pain, as you already know. Happiness It will fade Like my endurance, like my hope Like our baby in your womb More tears... I like this stanza the best. Was she pregnant/or is she? Great job.
This is a much need learning poem for so many on this site and in real life. Just because you are attracted, have good times,doesn't mean you can live together on a daily basis. Now the baby adds so more more pressure to this situation. I feel for both you and your g/f.
this was good... the topic was what really made me want to read it... but I'm glad that I did... the piece was really well written. your choic of words was good and the emotion was there.. although I think that if you had waited a few more mintues thuis piece might have been totally different from the rest... good job.
dude that sucks, break ups are a bad thing, but part of how we grow and learn. i think you did a fantastic job in writing this, you will find the person you deserve in life, just give it time** i know you will find the happiness you deserve, the emotions in this are great, really love this*
This is a really good poem. Its solid all the way through, meaning there is pure emotion from beginning to end. Its one of those poems you read and you can hear the voice of the speaker in you head, its really well written. I appreciate the sincerity of the piece. I'm adding his as a favorite.
I know exactly what your going through right now because I am going through the same thing, My boyfriend and I are at the end of a relationship that I thought was good. If you read my poem "You said you'd try" you'll see what I mean.
As for the poem, this is an amazing piece of work. I really and clearly understood, the emotion and saw and felt the pain. However it will get better, with time it always does. When your ready to move on you'll see that not all women are the same and that some are independent and have good intentions and you will find much more happieness. I wish you the best of luck. If you need someone to talk to I'm here.
wow, i am so sorry, that was indeed a very personal poem to you. i am almost at a complete loss as to what to say to you right now. i hope the the writing gives you some comfort. one question that i used to ask myself in a breakup situation was "does it hurt to be more: with them or without them?"
inspiration comes sometimes during our most painful moments. great poem, and im sorry. -Nikki