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    dots Submission Name: Let Me Godots
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    Author: xtremegentleman
    ASL Info:    22/m/FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.57 - 595/778/82
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 811
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    Description:
       Just fresh off a break-up. I mean like ten minutes fresh. Therefore, my mind was sort of clouded. But this is what came from it. Be nice, I'm very sensitive at the moment. (Just kidding) Bash it if you will.


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    dotsLet Me Godots
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    Trying to pull away
    You're crying me back
    Those tears will soon fade
    Shhh....

    Whether there is love is not the question
    Our compatibility is however
    Knowing that I need more than the physical things
    Knowing that you can't provide

    Happiness
    It will fade
    Like my endurance, like my hope
    Like our baby in your womb
    More tears...

    They're fading
    You say can we make it work
    Love works itself out
    And it's working itslef out the door

    Similar to how only the material things mattered
    And how you failed to borrow my sorrows
    And ease my griefs
    And hold an intellegent conversation

    I can't short change myself in sparing your hurt
    This will not work
    I let you know
    Now, let me go







    Submitted on 2005-01-28 09:25:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I hate it when the day comes that you have to let something go. And I ever so much know how it is to do that when a child is being carried in the womb.

    When one can put their own welfare first...they may suffer from a short period of grief....but they will end up being stronger and happier in the long run.

    Materialistic.....I notice those that are all about the money and the material and completely lose the emotion. You can only leave with that of which you hold inside of your soul...not that of which you hold in your hand.

    This was a powerful write B.

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2006-06-28 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. this one just made me place you on stalk.

    I like your style and your flow it's not like all the other post you see on here. I hope you dont think I'm taking credit away but your style kinda reminds me of a good friends and well known artist. pm me if you'd like to see some of his work.

    once again i'm off to read some more.
    | Posted on 2005-02-01 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it, it has such feeling and depth. I know the pain, as you already know.
    Happiness
    It will fade
    Like my endurance, like my hope
    Like our baby in your womb
    More tears...
    I like this stanza the best. Was she pregnant/or is she?
    Great job.

    Rain
    | Posted on 2005-02-01 00:00:00 | by Rain | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a much need learning poem for so many on this site and in real life. Just because you are attracted, have good times,doesn't mean you can live together on a daily basis. Now the baby adds so more more pressure to this situation. I feel for both you and your g/f.

    I wish you the best.

    This is a very good emotion love poem.

    keep writing and I will keep reading
    | Posted on 2005-01-28 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      this was good... the topic was what really made me want to read it... but I'm glad that I did... the piece was really well written. your choic of words was good and the emotion was there.. although I think that if you had waited a few more mintues thuis piece might have been totally different from the rest... good job.
    | Posted on 2005-01-28 00:00:00 | by bleedbroken | [ Reply to This ]
      dude that sucks, break ups are a bad thing, but part of how we grow and learn. i think you did a fantastic job in writing this, you will find the person you deserve in life, just give it time**
    i know you will find the happiness you deserve, the emotions in this are great, really love this*

    Jennifer
    | Posted on 2005-01-28 00:00:00 | by _winky_ | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a really good poem. Its solid all the way through, meaning there is pure emotion from beginning to end. Its one of those poems you read and you can hear the voice of the speaker in you head, its really well written. I appreciate the sincerity of the piece. I'm adding his as a favorite.
    | Posted on 2005-01-28 00:00:00 | by roycureton | [ Reply to This ]
      I know exactly what your going through right now because I am going through the same thing, My boyfriend and I are at the end of a relationship that I thought was good. If you read my poem "You said you'd try" you'll see what I mean.


    As for the poem, this is an amazing piece of work. I really and clearly understood, the emotion and saw and felt the pain.
    However it will get better, with time it always does. When your ready to move on you'll see that not all women are the same and that some are independent and have good intentions and you will find much more happieness. I wish you the best of luck.
    If you need someone to talk to I'm here.

    Audrey.
    | Posted on 2005-01-28 00:00:00 | by lost and alone | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, i am so sorry, that was indeed a very personal poem to you. i am almost at a complete loss as to what to say to you right now. i hope the the writing gives you some comfort.
    one question that i used to ask myself in a breakup situation was
    "does it hurt to be more: with them or without them?"

    inspiration comes sometimes during our most painful moments. great poem, and im sorry.
    -Nikki
    | Posted on 2005-01-28 00:00:00 | by stolie77 | [ Reply to This ]


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