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    dots Submission Name: Beginning Has Begundots
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    Author: lynn7
    ASL Info:    43/ St. Augustine, FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 419/288/103
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1226
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 808



    Description:
       I wrote this one night while lessening to a Neil Young
    album, so I guess he was my inspiration. I love to write poetry with music. Please let me know what you think.


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    dotsBeginning Has Begundots
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    Beginning Has Begun


    This bird will fly
    with one eye open
    and the other on the sky
    I try to keep the darkness
    away from my site
    even if it hit me straight on
    I'd be protected by the light
    the gray creeps in sometimes
    to try to get me bitting
    at my seams.
    but he shields me with his armor
    and he protects me with is his wing
    whenever I have tears of mist
    and rain is falling down
    I just look to the heavens
    for that little sound
    my angel of mine
    how he watches over me
    my angel of mine
    stands by me
    may this bird fly away
    into the sun
    to find a new day
    where the beginning has begun

    .




    Submitted on 2005-01-28 11:59:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really love birds used to describe anything so I automatically enjoy this piece.

    I love the very beginning of the piece, the introduction, flying with one eye open. Its such pleasant imagery.

    This was a nice one, leaving me with a really satisfied feeling of safety and comfort.


    Thanks for sharing!
    | Posted on 2014-12-20 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      I love anything to do with Angels! This was a great poem and I will add it to my Fav's Thanks for the read!
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2006-08-18 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      this was really good i liked it. and you were right it is similar to he brings the dawn. it was a great read. i hope to hear more from you keep it up
    | Posted on 2005-05-02 00:00:00 | by sweet_rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very good. I really liked it because you can just feel the passion from the poem. I hope to see more of your writings. Keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2005-01-28 00:00:00 | by sarahthegreat | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this, you can feel the passion in it and that is part of what makes it so beautiful. I hope to see more of your work. Very Nice.

    Lori_tab
    | Posted on 2005-01-28 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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