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    dots Submission Name: Broken Valentinedots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       This is to a guy that I know, I don't think that he will realize that it is to him but, Three Tears I've Cried for you.


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    dotsBroken Valentinedots
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    A few lies and a broken valentine
    who could deny that we were meant to be?
    I have been swimming in my own pain
    sorrows that could only come from a broken heart
    the night mocks me and reminds me I am alone
    the stars form your face
    every piece of beauty reminds me of you
    every piece of my heart that isn't broken
    I'll let you hold
    Because i am yours




    Submitted on 2005-01-28 12:34:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I also can feel the pain and sadness in your poems. You have expressed yourself beautifully in this piece. As much as I want to encourage you I also feel the desire to console you. I am much older then you and have went through many of the feelings you are experiencing, I hope that you realize that as strong and as intense as young love is as you grow older you will come to experience deep and mature love that has meaning and fullness that you cannot even imagine now. Hang in there and don't give up on all the beauty and wonder that awaits you in your future. Dan
    | Posted on 2005-03-17 00:00:00 | by dmm | [ Reply to This ]
      I must say that this almost perfectly describes how I feel about someone else... wow.
    this poem is, though not he best, pretty good; this poem has the power to touch the hearts of many, keep writing like this and you'll go far.

    -sjatos
    | Posted on 2005-01-29 00:00:00 | by whiteshadows | [ Reply to This ]
      One word; wow. You really got your message out, thats for sure. I actually got a lump in my throat! It's obvious that you put your feelings into this one, which makes it very good. Keep up the great work.
    | Posted on 2005-01-28 00:00:00 | by shanybaby17 | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't know what say. That was a good poem!
    I am so amazed by the talent on this site.
    | Posted on 2005-01-28 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]


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