A few lies and a broken valentine
who could deny that we were meant to be?
I have been swimming in my own pain
sorrows that could only come from a broken heart
the night mocks me and reminds me I am alone
the stars form your face
every piece of beauty reminds me of you
every piece of my heart that isn't broken
I'll let you hold
Because i am yours
I also can feel the pain and sadness in your poems. You have expressed yourself beautifully in this piece. As much as I want to encourage you I also feel the desire to console you. I am much older then you and have went through many of the feelings you are experiencing, I hope that you realize that as strong and as intense as young love is as you grow older you will come to experience deep and mature love that has meaning and fullness that you cannot even imagine now. Hang in there and don't give up on all the beauty and wonder that awaits you in your future. Dan
I must say that this almost perfectly describes how I feel about someone else... wow. this poem is, though not he best, pretty good; this poem has the power to touch the hearts of many, keep writing like this and you'll go far.
One word; wow. You really got your message out, thats for sure. I actually got a lump in my throat! It's obvious that you put your feelings into this one, which makes it very good. Keep up the great work.