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    dots Submission Name: Ill at Bestdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angst
    Total Views: 868
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 541



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       I don't know what to say about this one, i don't really like it but I wanted to post it.


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    dotsIll at Bestdots
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    my judgement has condemmed me
    through the darkness I can't see
    a light that should be shining
    has now abandoned me
    I am ill at best
    sick from all the pain
    willing myself to rest
    but in this only finding shame

    my judgment has condemmed me
    hell shines in your eyes
    you shall befriend me
    or become a powerful man of lies

    I am ill at best
    but this is nothing to recieve sypathy
    simply a request
    to acknowlege my disease




    Submitted on 2005-01-28 12:59:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Great piece Thanx for your comment on Untitled i like writing that expands the imagination , your write has that quality too with the life sequence your characters go thru.well done i will keep lookimg for your posta
    thanx Sandman
    | Posted on 2005-01-28 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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