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    dots Submission Name: mysterydots
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    Author: lynn7
    ASL Info:    43/ St. Augustine, FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 419/288/103
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1139
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    Description:
       This is one of my favorite poems. I wrote for a friend.
    I may never meet.


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    dotsmysterydots
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    In my darkness
    I walk looking for the answers
    not knowing quite what I’ll find
    in the depth of this troubled mind
    I ask myself
    What's really happening?
    Do I have the right
    to know what's in
    front of me?
    I open my heart
    I can feel the beat
    just listen
    you will hear the sounds
    of the whispers
    they’re all around

    "Am I insane?"
    How can this be?
    Is it really unfolding
    in front of me?
    why can't you see?!
    why can't you see?!
    Can you see?

    To my sweetness
    just open your soul to
    to the sun
    to find the love of the one
    who had died to give you life

    for me
    I'll never question
    where I'll go
    I'll give my life for my king
    I've made my peace
    I've accepted my faith
    even though
    It's all a mystery




    Submitted on 2005-01-28 19:57:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I loved this piece of poetry, very well done. I am especially fond of the part:
    "Am I insane?"
    How can this be?
    Is it really unfolding
    in front of me?
    | Posted on 2005-01-28 00:00:00 | by poeticeyes | [ Reply to This ]


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