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    dots Submission Name: I Wishdots
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    Author: grigori
    ASL Info:    23/M/St. Lucia
    Elite Ratio:    4.3 - 77/68/18
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsI Wishdots
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    I wish I could cry over you,
    For the things you've done to me,
    And while my friends laugh at me,
    I'd love you for all to see,

    I wish I could cry for you,
    So you'd know how I feel,
    And even as I look so strong,
    I wish I could hate you, for real,

    I still wonder why I can't sleep,
    And why you're in my dreams,
    Cause every time I close my eyes,
    Seeing you breaks me at the seams,

    It's even hard to write for you,
    Or about you in this case,
    And loving you never helps,
    And will never stop,
    Even as I wish it,
    Beat by beat...




    Submitted on 2005-01-28 21:43:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yeah i liked this...She must of got you good ...Anyway ..this was great ...simply worded and strong enough to really express your feelings ...Great job
    | Posted on 2005-01-28 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]
      damn, man, that's heavy. i can feel that...i've got the same thing going on...i wish i could tell you it get's better.
    as for the poem it's self, i like how your lines get shorter at the end...sort of like desperation. it was a cool piece.
    | Posted on 2005-01-28 00:00:00 | by DontSaveMySoul | [ Reply to This ]


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