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    Author: particularshard
    ASL Info:    23/m/DC
    Elite Ratio:    4.21 - 1159/1392/363
    Words: 272
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Misc
    Total Views: 292
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       The thoughts of a night. Actually not al of them, but enough of them that I feel its accurate.


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    I sit calm before the television -
    Confined without the bars in my little prison.
    The shining of the stars shifting through a prism
    The songs of the spheres sing my blessed catechism.
    I take libations with the quorum of whom ever it concerns
    And sequester scotch inside my mouth until it burns
    While I put my thoughts on paper since the stupid never learn.
    And the time that slips away just won't return.

    Sometimes when I'm drunk,
    I feel like people are ignoring me
    And possibly disrespecting me.
    This is a side-effect of the alcohol
    Slowing down my mind.
    A quick mind is quickly able to see what in the
    World is an affront to itself-
    As the seasons pass by,
    My mind increases and decreases its basal level
    Of activity.
    In months recently passed I wouldn't know -
    I would take all actions as directly personal.
    In the nine months that my mind undergoes
    Its gestation -
    Those cold months that are not growing
    Force me to live life.
    Life is dying from birth for some.
    During those dark months,
    I experience the saddest sadness of them.
    In years recent, I have refused the sadness,
    And have chosen anger -
    I've chosen to warm myself in the heat of those
    That I burn.
    At the end I am still cold.
    However, those months have ended
    And my light shines brightly once more.
    My light is my own, and thus it shall stay.
    However my light is for now bright enough,
    That I can allow others its shine -
    Without the fire that creates it.




    Submitted on 2005-01-28 23:47:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      To a greater or lesser extent all poets are egocentric because unless you believe in yourself, you can't be a good poet. Unfortunately you seem to take egocentrism to extremes. You sit up all night thinking aboutt what? Why, about yourself. And what is more I get the feeling that you are a very fragile ego and I hesitate to comment on your poem, because I fear how you will react. You have a morbid fear of being ignored, being "disrespected" and you are aware of your angry reaction to people who don't take the proper notice of you. No-one has the right to be respected. Respect is something you earn by your actions. If you haven't earned respect, tough. Live with it. You certainly won't earn respect by having an anger tantrum or by brooding about your own personality. Get OUT of yourself, out of the bedroom, out of the house. Take up sky diving, chess, synchronised swimming. Get some experiences to write poetry about OTHER than about yourself.
    | Posted on 2005-01-29 00:00:00 | by hanuman | [ Reply to This ]
      I've chosen to warm myself in the heat of those
    That I burn.
    I really liked this piece. This line particularly was very touching to me. Good write, honest and still very lucid. The piece is all for itself. Just thoughts flowing, good write. Good decision to write it down and capture it like this. -sin
    | Posted on 2005-02-02 00:00:00 | by sinmore | [ Reply to This ]



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