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    dots Submission Name: Whatever You Wantdots
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    Author: wildcatchamps
    ASL Info:    33 Las Vegas
    Elite Ratio:    5.42 - 47/57/34
    Words: 287
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 756
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    Bytes: 1812



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    dotsWhatever You Wantdots
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    Anything you want from me
    You got it You can have my love
    You're the girl of my life
    Am I all you're dreaming of
    Yes you're my desire I wanna give you so much
    for the things that you give to me
    Just take my love baby
    because you are so dear to me

    Whatever you want
    Whatever you need
    My heart belongs to you
    Whatever you need
    there's nothing I won't do I say whatever you want
    my heart belongs to you
    I say whatever you need
    I'll be right here for you
    Once in a lifetime
    You will find someone like you
    and now that I have you
    Here's what I'm gonna do
    I'm gonna give you so much
    I will give you my all and all
    over and over again lady
    lovin' you too much baby
    is not, is not, is not a sin

    Whatever you want
    Whatever you need
    My heart belongs to you
    Whatever you need
    there's nothing I won't do
    I say whatever you want
    my heart belongs to you
    I say whatever you need
    I'll be right here for you
    Anything you want I'll do it for you
    in the morning
    whenever you want it
    in the evening
    whenever you need
    when the night fogs
    you know that I got it
    so baby just call me
    you know that I'll do it

    Whatever you want
    Whatever you need
    My heart belongs to you
    Whatever you need
    there's nothing I won't do I say whatever you want
    my heart belongs to you
    I say whatever you need
    I'll be right here for you I say whatever you want
    my heart belongs to you




    Submitted on 2005-01-29 04:07:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      why do you love this girl so much? maybe you could tell us. i hope she is worth that kind of love. a little monotonous, but i'm sure it would sound much better with music. sometimes you just feel something and write it with such a passion and it means so much to you, but other people don't respond the same way. it is definately worth saying, but maybe you could change it up a little.
    | Posted on 2005-01-29 00:00:00 | by xena z rokax | [ Reply to This ]
      I assume a pop song or something ghosted by Status Quo.
    Light to the point of being fatuous this I suppose would be played loud in your Honda Civic...
    Or mine.
    That aside, this is also monotonous and would in my view for what it's worth benefit from some breaks here and there for the inclusion of a chorus that would allow for the seamless passage from one verse of ideas to the next.
    But as ever, it's almost impossible to give a full account of a set of lyrics without the handrail of a tune. I am stuck with Status Quo and it's feckin' horrid...
    Later,
    K
    | Posted on 2005-01-29 00:00:00 | by Awkward | [ Reply to This ]
      Whatever you want
    Whatever you need
    My heart belongs to you
    Whatever you need

    My Heart...whatever you need these lines break the flow, maybe take the third whatever you need out for something else. Whatever you need? Yeah, well since the song was comprised of mostly of these four lines, if you could fix this it'd sound pretty good. I wish I could hear the actual song too, I'm pretty sure that would help. Sounds like you would bend over backwards for this girl? Don't become her [censored] - that's no way to live lol
    | Posted on 2005-01-29 00:00:00 | by wordslinger | [ Reply to This ]


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