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    dots Submission Name: Fatamadots
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    Author: Khaled AbdAllah
    ASL Info:    22 - male - Egypt
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 129/137/30
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 981
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    Description:
       I have wrote this poem while I was working in the harbour and felt that I miss my little sister's baby. I began to imagine her saying " my sweet uncle give me a kiss " and I have also imagined that the days run and she has grow up so fast and I'm walking with her, taking her to her husband. I want her to know that I love her so much and this why I wrote her this poem espically for her. Hope you will all like it.


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    dotsFatamadots
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    In your merry birth.
    I was the happiest man
    in the face of the earth.
    And why not, I became uncle.
    Fatama you do not know.
    How much I love you?
    But day after day
    You'll know your place
    into your uncle's heart.
    I hope you best life.
    Than the one we live now.
    A peaceful world with no wars.
    A quite world with no hatred.
    I'm waiting for that day to come.
    When you say it with your
    Sweet tongue " Uncle Khaled ".
    I'm waiting for the day to come.
    When I'll put my hand into yours.
    Walking with, taking you.
    To your bride groom.
    I pray for God to make me
    Alive to see that day.
    From here and through the distances.
    I'm sending you one hundred kisses.
    Upon your sweet, soft cheeks.







    Submitted on 2005-01-29 08:08:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is SOOOOO SWEEEEEET! It's especially really beautiful to me because a am an aunty of my sister's two children. They mean the world to me and i can completely relate to the concern protectiveness and love that you have expressed in your poem. Fatama is really a blessed bundle of joy to have an uncle as wonderful as you. I do not know you but this poem reveals a really sensitive side that is completely alluring. My niece and nephew call me "Nanna" so i can relate to u when u use the line "Sweet tongue "Uncle Khaleb"." Well written . . Wish i can an uncle as caring as you!
    | Posted on 2005-03-19 00:00:00 | by AfricanPrincess | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi there! Your poem is about a little girl who makes your day brighter. About your niece, I think it is very sweet of you to dedicate a poem to her. Let her grow up and one day she will be proud to have an uncle like.
    It is a very sweet poem. Since it is very personal I won’t suggest anything on it. With love shabnam
    | Posted on 2005-02-01 00:00:00 | by shabnam | [ Reply to This ]
      man thats kind of creepy. I don't know maybe it's just the difference in culture. Here in america I think they would wonder about me if I started talking like this.

    But anyway, whatever floats your boat bro.


    peace,
    mister fizzle
    | Posted on 2005-01-29 00:00:00 | by Mister Fizzle | [ Reply to This ]


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