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    dots Submission Name: angel of musicdots
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    Author: XxMusikJunkiexX
    ASL Info:    18/f/ny
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 109/134/39
    Words: 285
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       ~surrender to your darkest dreams~


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    dotsangel of musicdots
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    “No more tears tonight, love,”,
    She melted in his arms,
    He whispered as he spoke to her,
    For once nothing could go wrong,
    She placed her head onto his shoulder,
    And with her hand she felt his chest,
    His heart shattered some time ago,
    She wondered when it would mend,
    “There must be a break in the storm somewhere,”
    She spoke but her words were laced with fear,
    Theirs was a world of death and passion,
    And the music’s grown sadder through the years,
    In his phantom eyes there was a darkness,
    He couldn’t touch so he tried to feel,
    “No more memories tonight, love,
    Because only the music is real,”
    She closed her eyes and held him,
    Let his caress slowly melt to hers,
    “only you can sing that sweet song of night,
    You’re the only one who knows the words,”
    He pulled her closer as they danced,
    Felt her music awake in his,
    “as long as you’re here, I promise you’re safe,
    I love you darling, you know that,”
    “please don’t leave me, Angel,”
    She clung to his remaining warmth,
    “Angel, say you’ll never leave me,
    Because I cannot win this fight alone,”
    And as they danced they held each other,
    As if that would make the darkness go away,
    They clung to each other like children of God,
    But not even God can stop Hells flames,
    He trembled as he lost control,
    Because even Freedom comes with a price,
    He turned his head and inhaled the music,
    And surrendered to the night,
    She felt his song grow weak in him
    As his darkness fought the light,
    She held him close for one last embrace,
    And heard the music fade to silence…




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