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    dots Submission Name: Poetry and Musicdots

    Author: lynn7
    ASL Info:    43/ St. Augustine, FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 419/288/103
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       This is what I believe.

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    dotsPoetry and Musicdots

    He's all poetry
    He's all music
    He's the sunshine that keeps us alive
    He's all the secrets that are deep inside
    He's all the facts that can't be denied
    He's the foundation of the earth
    He's the reason for our birth
    He's the time that won’t stand still
    He's the power of every man's will
    He's the passion that never ends
    He's a smile of a long-lost friend
    He's a love that endures all
    He's a net if you should fall
    He's a king of all the earth
    He's a man from a virgin birth

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      i like it. but as far as poetry goes it could be better. i think i sorta have the same beliefs as you so that was cool and good i guess. i liked it...nice read. i have seen the repeatative lines before but i'm sure you know that wasn't all that unique. it kinda had a nice effect. the tone was good, calm. just sorta saying what you belief and not worrying about what anybody else believes or thinks about yours. pretty good. it had a good ending to it. just right. fit the poem perfectly.

    | Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by beth freese | [ Reply to This ]
      this my friend is also beautiful
    i felt evrey feeling you can imagine when i read it
    please keep writing your style is genuine and true
    please if you get a chance read some of my poetry and let me know what you think
    and Congradulations on a very strong and well written piece
    i am adding it to my favorites
    | Posted on 2005-10-07 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      I can relate to your poetry. That is how both poetry and music makes me feel. Great decriptions of it all gives it a very simple yet satisfying feeling.
    | Posted on 2005-09-10 00:00:00 | by wallya20 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, this is a very interesting piece. i know some poeple would not like the repitition in the lines, but...


    i have done this too! i think it works in some pieces, and here it does work. its simple with a strong meaning...nice job!

    | Posted on 2005-05-26 00:00:00 | by ThaCrib | [ Reply to This ]
      very great. I love this. I love the discriptions that you gave. Just keep writing. You described things very good in this poem.
    | Posted on 2005-02-07 00:00:00 | by sarahthegreat | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked it! It was a thought-provoker shall we say. It reminds of purpose and being and all that jazz. G'job and G'write.
    | Posted on 2005-01-29 00:00:00 | by brassmonkey2009 | [ Reply to This ]

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