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    dots Submission Name: what can be said?dots
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    Author: snacky fish
    ASL Info:    31/male/FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 377/472/111
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 1079
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       i think i wrote a psalm lol... i am not sure but its just some of my thoughts in poetry. hope ya like


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    What can be said about a broken heart?
    Who can offer a cure?
    Tears don't run when mourning turns to hate
    "Sorry", has no memorial in a time when it is to late

    What can be said about tonques that speak lies?
    Who can discern deceit from a face they love?
    A lusting ghost plots from behind a liars eyes
    Fixing for itself a prize while its soul slowly dies

    What can be said about fools and thier folly?
    Who can not know their foolishness but fools themselves?
    Lost in a circle where they chase emptyness
    To nothing with their thoughts, left wanting in regret fullness




    Submitted on 2005-01-29 23:01:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      WOW. This blows my mind with its greatness and heartfelt words. I just love this. It is definatly better than your other poems, (which is a compliment because I really like some poems of yours that I have read). The middle stanza is my favorite part. This is going in the favorites for sure. Keep writing this great stuff.
    Loved it.
    -Katj
    | Posted on 2005-04-15 00:00:00 | by Katj | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah thats what im talking about ;) ....Im going to follow you around and watch everything you do now ...Because i can see where you put everything into something ...and other times where you just dont ....This is fantastic ...Im jealous ...Id love to write like that ...
    Well done
    Much love
    | Posted on 2005-02-07 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]
      THIS IS AN INCREDABLLY POWERFULL AND MOVING PIECE OF ART! This poem reminds me of a dark, emotional place I've been more time than I want to admit. "What can be said about a broken heart/ who can offer a cure?" Beautiful man. Through this poem I feel a kind of connection with the author. Beautiful wording as well. Very good work.
    | Posted on 2005-01-29 00:00:00 | by spoken | [ Reply to This ]
      This is one of the best poems I think you have written. I am mesmerized by your words and insights. I only have one qualm with this work and it is just in the spelling and the grammar. So I cleaned it up for myself...if you don't mind.

    What can be said about a broken heart?
    Who can offer a cure?
    Tears donít run when mourning turns to hate
    "Sorry", has no memorial in a time when it is to late

    What can be said about tongues that speak lies?
    Who can discern deceit from a face they love?
    A lusting ghost plots from behind a liars eyes
    Fixing for itself a prize while its soul slowly dies (favorite stanza...by the way)

    What can be said about fools and their folly?
    Who can not know their foolishness but fools themselves?
    Lost in a circle where they chase emptiness
    To nothing with their thoughts, left wanting in regret fullness

    | Posted on 2005-02-18 00:00:00 | by Rubi_Roja | [ Reply to This ]


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