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    dots Submission Name: How Will You Know?dots
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    Author: wildcatchamps
    ASL Info:    33 Las Vegas
    Elite Ratio:    5.42 - 47/57/34
    Words: 292
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 587
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1644



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    dotsHow Will You Know?dots
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    Ooh ooh oh yeah
    I kept it inside for the longest time and I canít keep keeping it
    All this love thatís inside of my heart
    Maybe itís safer not to say that I care
    Maybe this road wonít lead me anywhere
    But if I donít tell you now
    I may never get the chance again
    To tell you that I need you, tell you what Iím feeling
    If I keep these feelings in
    And if I donít say the words
    How will you hear whatís inside my heart
    How will you know then
    If I donít tell you now

    Ohhh
    Iíd do anything to be in your dreams and I canít stand standing by
    With this dream thatís inside my heart
    Maybe Iím only gonna make a mistake
    And thereís a chance maybe my heart will break

    But if I donít tell you now
    I may never get the chance again
    To tell you that I need you, tell you what Iím feeling
    If I keep these feelings in
    And if I donít say the words
    How will you hear whatís inside my heart
    How will you know then
    If I donít tell you now

    Ooooooh
    How will you know youíre inside my soul
    Oh itís driving me crazy
    Cause you donít see, youíre the world to me
    Iím so afraid to see
    The way that I feel for you

    If I donít tell you now
    I may never get the chance again
    To tell you that I need you, tell you what Iím feeling
    If I keep these feelings in
    And if I donít say the words
    How will you hear whatís inside my heart
    How will you know then
    If I donít tell you now




    Submitted on 2005-01-30 03:14:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Okay some of this is mildly repetivtive. Suck as the
    "I kept it inside for the longest time and I canít keep keeping it"
    I can't keep keeping it. There could be a different way to say that so it flowed better. maybe
    "I kept it inside for the longest time, I can't keep doing that." just a little change so it tweeks it and doesn't trip up the reader.
    Over all I thought this was pretty good. Good expression of unknown love and longing.
    | Posted on 2005-02-08 00:00:00 | by Cigarette Smoke | [ Reply to This ]


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