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    dots Submission Name: Exotic Landdots
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    Author: Dana
    ASL Info:    23/F/Dreamland
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 79/87/26
    Words: 387
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 791
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    Description:
       About my holiday in Spain, Costa Tropical (2003). It's rather a simple poem, it doesn't have any subtexts, it is more built on my feelings and memories in connection with this experience...


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    Iíll tell you a true story
    About my journey to exotic land
    For my eyes which was a glory
    The scenery that was so grand.

    Trip to a place I had never planned.
    It was a bolt from the blue
    The heart was so delighted
    About a chance I had no clue.

    One week before my birthday
    Flying over the cities and the seas
    My restless spirit on the way
    Wondering about what it sees.

    Landing at the dark night
    Palms and the ground in red
    The lamps our guiding light
    My eyes and spirit looking ahead

    The journey to tropical coast
    The place of forever sun
    Sand and the sea I like the most
    Where you can have so much fun

    Picturesque surroundings
    Discovered in every while
    Creating colorful feelings
    Things that make me smile

    Cloud-kissing mountains,
    Those heights, so giddy
    It makes me grow dizzy
    Lovely infinite blue sea,
    Your vast is drowning in me

    Surrounded by rich orchards
    Filled with sweet perfume
    I just look around devouringly
    So many exotic trees
    Lemons and mandarins
    The scent of these fruits
    It's like a light summer breeze

    Dark and rocky Cueva de Nerja
    The mystery created by water
    Motion of tourists in the darks caves
    Step by step you can see a creepy quarter

    Balcony of Europe - veranda of the sea
    Beaches and the cliffs
    The wonders you can see
    Bullfights at the rings of rodeo
    Pleasure for cowboy souls, but not me

    Alhambra the vision of history
    Kingdom of Spanish Sultans
    Built at the foot of Sierra Nevada
    Overlooks the city of Granada

    Magical white Frigiliana
    Andalusian mountain village
    For my spirit like nirvana
    With its whitewashed houses
    And the narrow rocky streets

    Malaga, what a beautiful city
    Home of Picasso and Banderas
    The city where everything begun and
    Place where itís time to bid farewell

    It was a glorious vision and sight
    It impressed my soul like an art
    For my soul and eyes it was delight
    Like a new file it was saved in my heart

    I sit in the plane and think
    Whispering the words of goodbye
    To my exotic land:
    "Adios, Espana!"

    © by DANA 2005




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    ||| Comments |||
      oh wow, that sounds like a really beautiful, romantic place, its so good, its almost like you made it up, like a made up neverland that only certain few can enter... I really enjoyed the imagery in this, it is packed with lovely tropical imagery, I feel like I am there when I read it... Very Good!
    | Posted on 2005-02-01 00:00:00 | by ViCiOuSWrItEr | [ Reply to This ]


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